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Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificially intelligent robots. What is your opinion? v.3

Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificially intelligent robots. What is your opinion? v. 3
In today’s time, some people are of the opinion that almost all occupation will be replaced by artificial intelligent robots. I am of the opinion that the profession which required no or less skills would be replaced by robots, but highly skilled jobs will still be done by humans. The work which are less skilled work will certainly be carried out by the robots. Hiring a person for a menial job like security guard, parking ticket checker etc requires a lot of money for an employer. So, it is highly likely they will deploy robots instead of humans which are cheaper and need less maintenance, due to this, the company profit will go up. For example, in a manufacturing factory, there used to be a lot of workers and now all the work has been replaced by machines that was only one time investment. As a result, the employers are making huge amount of profits. For this reason, unskilled jobs will be replaced by artificial intelligence. On the other hand, jobs that require professional expertise and special skills can never be replaced by artificial intelligence. For example, psychologists, teachers and doctors are profession which require human interaction, and expertise cannot be replaced. Those profession have taken hundreds of years to develop, hence are highly unlikely be replaced by the machines. Moreover, robots can do a work which is of repetitive nature, a task which requires logical thinking and application of knowledge will not be affected by them. In conclusion, in my opinion, the jobs which require special training cannot be replaced, on the other hand, laborious or low skilled work will eventually be done by the robots in the future.
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which are less skilled
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certainly
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a lot of
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, the employers are making huge amount of profits.

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by artificial intelligence.

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professional expertise and special
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by artificial intelligence.
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, psychologists, teachers and doctors are profession which
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require
human interaction, and expertise cannot
be replaced
.
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Those profession
have taken hundreds of years to develop,
hence
are
highly
unlikely
be replaced
by the machines.
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work
which is of repetitive nature, a task which
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logical thinking and application of knowledge will not be
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by them.

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, in my opinion, the
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jobs
which
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require
special training cannot
be replaced
,
on the other hand
, laborious or low skilled
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work
will
eventually
be done
by the robots in the future.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificially intelligent robots. What is your opinion? v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
280 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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