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Some people believe that natural ability is necessary to excel at sports. Others believe that hard work and practice is more important. Discuss both views and add your opinion. v.2

Some people believe that natural ability is necessary to excel at sports. Others believe that hard work and practice is more important. v. 2
The question of how to achieve success in sports is becoming increasingly controversial. While some people think that one has to have an innate ability to succeed at sports, others believe that one has to work hard and practise in order to excel at sports. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument and explain why I believe that hard work and practice is essential to be successful in sports. Some people believe that one has to possess an inborn ability to excel at sports. They have justifiable reason to believe this because certain sports require innate skills which cannot be acquired through hard work or practice. For example, studies have shown that people from certain tribes in Kenya are born with athletic skills so they can easily win races. These skills are hereditary. For this reason, these people believe that natural abilities are required to excel at sports. As opposed to the above-mentioned view, other people believe that with consistent practice and hard work, one can excel in sports and I agree. This is because a person is bound to fail, regardless of how talented he or she is, without consistent practice and hard work. Research has shown that children born with athletic skills tend to lose these skills in their teenage years if they do not include a regimen of consistent practice and hard work in their daily activities. The above-mentioned reason is why these people believe that hard work and practice is more important in succeeding in sports. In conclusion, despite the varying opinion of people, I believe that one has to consistently practise and work hard, rather than rely on natural abilities, in order to be successful in sports.
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. Research has shown that children born with athletic
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tend to lose these
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in their teenage years if they do not include a regimen of consistent
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in their daily activities. The above-mentioned reason is why these
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in succeeding in
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IELTS essay Some people believe that natural ability is necessary to excel at sports. Others believe that hard work and practice is more important. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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