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Some believe that education success is based on good teachers and others believe that it depends upon student’s attitude. Discuss both views and give your opinion with relevant example. v.1

Some believe that education success is based on good teachers and others believe that it depends upon student’s attitude. v. 1
Academic performance of a student depends on several factors. According to some people, the guidance provided by the teacher will determine whether the pupil succeeds or not. Others opine that the attitude of the undergraduate is more important. In my opinion, a lecturer certainly plays an important role in ensuring the academic success of the junior; however, even if the teacher provides the best mentor, the student will not succeed if they lack the right demeanour. Teachers are undoubtedly nation builders. They impart knowledge to students. They shape their character and inspire them to work hard. A good supervisor can make even complicated concepts easier for the student to grasp. Engaging teachers can also make boring subjects more interesting for the student and prevent their attention from wavering. Needless to say, teachers play a crucial role in the educational prosperity of the undergraduate. On the other hand, the attitude of the student is the ultimate factor in determining whether they will achieve academic advance or not. For example, in a class of 40 students not everyone gets the same grade, although they have the same teachers. Obviously, the competence of the educator is not the deciding factor. Rather, it is the student’s sentiment towards learning. Some students have an unquenchable thirst for knowledge. They put in extra effort to learn. By contrast, there are some students who never take their studies seriously. Their focus is elsewhere and they can never achieve achievement even if their teachers motivate them in the best possible way. To recapitulate, the mentor provided by the tutor is certainly important. However, no graduate can achieve profit just because they have a good supervisor. The professor can only show the path and it is for the student to decide whether they want to take that path or not. Do you have an essay on this topic? Submit it below in the comments for a free band score estimate.
Academic performance of a
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depends on several factors. According to
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some
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people
, the guidance provided by the
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will determine whether the pupil succeeds or not. Others opine that the attitude of the undergraduate is more
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important
. In my opinion, a lecturer
certainly
plays an
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important
role in ensuring the academic success of the junior;
however
, even if the
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teacher
provides the best mentor, the
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student
will not succeed if they lack the right
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demeanour
.

Teachers are
undoubtedly
nation builders. They impart knowledge to
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students
. They shape their character and inspire them to work
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hard
. A
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good
supervisor can
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make
even complicated concepts easier for the
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student
to grasp. Engaging
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teachers
can
also
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make
boring subjects more interesting for the
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student
and
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prevent
their attention from wavering. Needless to say,
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teachers
play a crucial role in the educational prosperity of the undergraduate.

On the other hand
, the attitude of the
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student
is the ultimate factor in determining whether they will achieve academic advance or not.
For example
, in a
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class
of 40
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students
not everyone
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gets
the same grade, although they have the same
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teachers
.
Obviously
, the competence of the educator is not the deciding factor.
Rather
, it is the
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student’s
sentiment towards learning.
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Some
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students
have an unquenchable thirst for knowledge. They put in extra effort to learn. By contrast, there are
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some
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students
who never take their studies
seriously
. Their focus is
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elsewhere and
they can never achieve achievement even if their
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teachers
motivate them in the best possible way.

To recapitulate, the mentor provided by the tutor is
certainly
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important
.
However
, no graduate can achieve profit
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just
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because
they have a
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good
supervisor. The professor can
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only
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show
the path and it is for the
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student
to decide whether they want to take that path or not.

Do you have an essay on this topic? Submit it below in the comments for a free band score estimate.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some believe that education success is based on good teachers and others believe that it depends upon student’s attitude. v. 1

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