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Societies that do not respect and honor their women can never make progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree. v.1

Societies that do not respect and honor their women can never make progress. v. 1
In the human beings' history, females have a significant role in the civilization; however, their endeavours to nations have not been always recognized worldwide. Some people advocate that respecting and honouring females are crucial to the development of nations. I definitely opine this view due to females' unique role in human societies and the essay will discuss my view. To begin with, firstly, it is a fact that nations that have promoted equal social status among genders have developed and evolved dramatically in the world. The history of European countries provides profound evidences that feminism activities played a leading role in the individual national development, because these activities enhanced the social status of females in families or societies. By advocating feminism,  women there have earned credits from their male peers and are allowed to contribute themselves to all economic sectors not only as housewives rather professionals. As a result, countries with high awareness of feminism have the better economic performance and become stronger. In addition, females are as essentially important as males in families, societies and even nations. Besides being a wife or mother, they are also able to contribute themselves to their communities if they are allowed. Females are as intelligent and resilient as males. Moreover, after giving birth to their descendants, females are their primary caregivers and have crucial roles in nurturing and shaping them. Welled respected women will nurture strong and well-educated children.   Therefore, national leaders who are aware of the significant roles and capacities of females and guide them to contribute to all economic sectors will lead the nation to develop into a harmonious one. In conclusion,   advocating feminism will enhance the social status of females and contribute to national development in all sectors due to the above reasons. Therefore, it is crucial to convey the message that respecting and honouring women are one of basic social values of ordinary citizens, even more important to the youth who are the leaders of the future.
In the human beings' history,
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females
have a significant
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role
in the civilization;
however
, their
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endeavours
to
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nations
have not been always recognized worldwide.
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Some
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people
advocate that respecting and
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honouring
 females are crucial to the development of
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nations
. I definitely opine this view due to females' unique role in human societies and the essay will discuss my view.

To
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begin
with,
firstly
, it is a fact that
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nations
that have promoted equal
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social
status among genders have developed and evolved
dramatically
in the world. The history of European countries provides profound evidences that
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feminism
activities played a leading
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role
in the individual national development,
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because
these activities enhanced the
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social
status of
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females
in families or societies. By advocating
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feminism
,
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women there have earned credits from their male peers and are
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allowed
to
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contribute
themselves to all economic sectors not
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only
as housewives
rather
professionals.
As a result
, countries with high awareness of
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feminism
have the better economic performance and become stronger.

In addition
,
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females
are as
essentially
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important
as males in families, societies and even
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nations
.
Besides
being a wife or mother, they are
also
able to
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contribute
themselves to their communities if they are
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allowed
.
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Females
are as intelligent and resilient as males.
Moreover
, after giving birth to their descendants,
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females
are their primary caregivers and have crucial
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roles
in nurturing and shaping them. Welled respected women will nurture strong and well-educated children.
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Therefore
, national leaders who are aware of the significant
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roles
and capacities of
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females
and guide them to
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contribute
to all economic sectors will lead the nation to develop into a harmonious one.

In conclusion
,
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advocating
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feminism
will enhance the
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social
status of
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females
and
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contribute
to national development in all sectors due to the above reasons.
Therefore
, it is crucial to convey the message that respecting and
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honouring
women are one of basic
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social
values of ordinary citizens, even more
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important
to the youth who are the leaders of the future.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS essay Societies that do not respect and honor their women can never make progress. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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