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It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e. g. Dinosaur, dodos …) There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree? v.3

It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e. g. Dinosaur, dodos …) There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. v. 3
It is argued that there is no convincing reason for people try to prevent animal species to become extinct in nature. I completely disagree with this idea, and this essay will argue why people need to protect endangered species from becoming extinct. Firstly, the environmental factors plays an essential role in natural habitats for animal species. Many rare animals were wiped out by climate, such as dinosaur, dodos. For instance, in 2019 due to prolonged droughts devastated forest in Australia. This forest fire causes a heavy damage is that more half million animals died, such as: koala, kangaroo. In addition, people also are one of the major reasons harm to animals. Illegal animal hunting leads to animal species which are on the verge of extinction; therefore, the government should impose new laws against using animal products. Seconds, wild animal species have great aesthetic and socio-cultural values, and they contribute to our rich ecosystem. For example, in many countries, animal species plays a vital role in showing cultures of that country. Furthermore, in natural the environment, animal species are connected; thus, if one species become extinction lead to many other species also have to suffer as the food chain is disrupted. Obviously, if people are protected animals, we will help maintain a balanced ecosystem. In conclusion, the mass animal extinction does not completely fall upon natural process, but as a consequence of our doing. People need to aware of protecting animal species, and everyone should have the responsibility to maintain animal species.
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is argued
that there is no convincing reason for
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people
try to
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prevent
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animal
species to become extinct in nature. I completely disagree with this
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idea
, and this essay will argue why
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people
need to protect endangered species from becoming extinct.

Firstly
, the environmental factors plays an essential role in natural habitats for
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animal
species.
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Many
rare
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animals
were wiped
out by climate, such as dinosaur, dodos.
For instance
, in 2019 due to prolonged droughts devastated forest in Australia. This forest fire causes
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a heavy damage
is that more half million
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animals
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died
, such as: koala, kangaroo.
In addition
,
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people
also
are one of the major reasons harm to
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animals
. Illegal
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animal
hunting leads to
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animal
species which are on the verge of extinction;
therefore
, the
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government
should impose new laws against using
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animal
products.

Seconds, wild
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animal
species have great aesthetic and
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socio-cultural
values, and they contribute to our rich ecosystem.
For example
, in
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many
countries,
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animal
species plays a vital role in showing cultures of that country.
Furthermore
, in natural the environment,
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animal
species
are connected
;
thus
, if one species become extinction lead to
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many
other species
also
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have to
suffer as the food chain
is disrupted
.
Obviously
, if
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people
are protected
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animals
, we will
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help
maintain a balanced ecosystem.

In conclusion
, the mass
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animal
extinction does not completely fall upon natural process,
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but
as a consequence of our doing.
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People
need to aware of protecting
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animal
species, and everyone should have the responsibility to maintain
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animal
species.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e. g. Dinosaur, dodos …) There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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