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Social media has many positive uses, but there have been some negative consequences to it as well. Identify a problem caused by social media and describe the solutions you would propose to address this problem. v.5

Social media has many positive uses, but there have been some negative consequences to it as well. Identify a problem caused by social media and describe the solutions you would propose to address this problem. v. 5
One troubling aspect of social media is that it provides a venue for kids to engage in online bullying. Parents and educators should counteract this trend by teaching kids about the seriousness of bullying and communicating openly about what children experience online. Social media did not give rise to bullying, but it has changed and possibly amplified its effects. In the past, bullying would most often involve a person or a small group of people picking on someone. With social media, the group of aggressors can be much larger, and the opportunity for causing humiliation much greater. Additionally, people feel freer to say things online that they wouldn’t say to another person face-to-face. These factors have given rise to a form of bullying that is new and uniquely dangerous. To counteract online bullying, educators and parents must teach young people how damaging bullying can be. Kids can suffer deep psychological wounds from it, and some kids are more susceptible to long-lasting harm than others. What starts out as a joke can easily transform into damaging behavior. Kids need training from adults to learn how to recognize inappropriate behavior from their peers, and how to stand up for someone experiencing mistreatment. Of course, bullying will still occur even when kids are aware of the damage it can cause. Some parents try prevent unwanted online activity by strictly monitoring their child’s internet use. This makes sense for young children. However, many older kids would interpret such an intrusion as a lack of trust. By a certain age, most kids know how to get around their parents’ watchful eyes anyway. That’s why parents and educators must attempt to communicate openly about what children experience online. Open communication builds trust, giving parents a window into when their child might be involved in a range of negative online situations like bullying. While social media is likely to become an even greater presence in all of our live in the years to come, it will remain important to do our best to use it in ways that are healthy.
One troubling aspect of social
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is that it provides a venue for
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kids
to engage in
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online
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bullying
.
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and educators should counteract this trend by teaching
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kids
about the seriousness of
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bullying
and communicating
openly
about what children experience online.

Social
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media
did not give rise to
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bullying
,
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but
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changed
and
possibly
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bullying
would most
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often
involve a person or a
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small
group of
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people
picking on someone. With social
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media
, the group of aggressors can be much larger, and the opportunity for causing humiliation much greater.
Additionally
,
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people
feel freer to say things
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online
that they wouldn’t say to another person face-to-face. These factors have
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given
rise to a form of
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bullying
that is
new and
uniquely
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dangerous
.

To counteract
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online
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bullying
, educators and
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parents
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teach young
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how damaging
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can be.
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can suffer deep psychological wounds from it, and
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some
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kids
are more susceptible to long-lasting harm than others. What
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out as a joke can
easily
transform into damaging behavior.
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need training from adults to learn how to recognize inappropriate behavior from their peers, and how to stand up for someone experiencing mistreatment.

Of course
,
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will
still
occur even when
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kids
are aware of the damage it can cause.
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parents
try
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unwanted
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activity by
strictly
monitoring their child’s internet
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. This
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older
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would interpret such an intrusion as a lack of trust. By a certain age, most
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know how to
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watchful eyes anyway. That’s why
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parents
and educators
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attempt to communicate
openly
about what children experience
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online
. Open communication builds trust, giving
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parents
a window into when their child might
be involved
in a range of
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negative
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online
situations like bullying.

While social
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is likely to become an even greater presence in all of our
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live
in the years to
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come
, it will remain
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important
to do our best to
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use
it in ways that are healthy.
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32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Social media has many positive uses, but there have been some negative consequences to it as well. Identify a problem caused by social media and describe the solutions you would propose to address this problem. v. 5

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
343 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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