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Many universities charge higher fees for foreign students. Why do they do this? Do you believe that it is fair? v.2

Many universities charge higher fees for foreign students. Why do they do this? Do you believe that it is fair? v. 2
Universities are the best place students always choose after their tertiary schooling. Most of the students prefer to study in a good university. In my point of view, universities take a large amount of money from foreign students because they have to keep their standard and I think it is fair to take more money from the foreign students. Firstly, universities carry out a particular standard and reputation. When students choose a selected university to study, it increases their productivity as well as overall development. The university charges huge fees for outside students so that they can have qualified and experienced lecturers to teach and mould them. There will be many facilities for the students to access like libraries, laboratories, multi-purpose halls and so on. Universities offer accommodation and food to the students. Students can achieve their dream by studying in a reputed university with an excellent professional background. Secondly, it is fair to take high fees from the foreign students because if they are getting the quality education and facilities it is worth to get the money from them. They have many options in subjects and it satisfies them by choosing the best university to study. On the other hand, universities do not take much payment from the citizens, they always try to care and protect their citizens by giving good quality education. Moreover, many universities prefer more opportunities for the students to grow as an individual and to get a good job in the future by giving the very good education. Many universities have a different policy for foreign students and they usually take a higher fee from them. The citizens of a country already pay a large amount of tax to the government and thus government ensures the education for their children and grandchildren. So it is totally justified that local students should pay less. To sum up, universities can charge huge fees from the students and the university should make sure that they are giving the best education to the students according to their wish.
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are the best place
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students
always choose after their tertiary schooling. Most of the
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students
prefer to study in a
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good
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university
. In my point of view,
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universities
take a large amount of money from
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foreign
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students
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because
they
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have to
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keep
their standard and I
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think
it is
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fair
to take more money from the
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foreign
students.

Firstly
,
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universities
carry out a particular standard and reputation. When
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students
choose a selected
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university
to study, it increases their productivity
as well
as
overall
development. The
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university
charges huge
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fees
for outside
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students
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so
that they can have qualified and experienced lecturers to teach and
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mould
them. There will be
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many
facilities for the
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students
to access like libraries, laboratories, multi-purpose halls and
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so
on.
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Universities
offer accommodation and food to the
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students
.
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Students
can achieve their dream by studying in a reputed
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university
with an excellent professional background.

Secondly
, it is
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fair
to take high
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fees
from the
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foreign
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students
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because
if they are getting the quality
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education
and facilities it is worth to
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get
the money from them. They have
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many
options in subjects and it satisfies them by choosing the best
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university
to study.
On the other hand
,
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universities
do not take much payment from the citizens, they always try to care and protect their citizens by giving
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good
quality
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education
.
Moreover
,
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many
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universities
prefer more opportunities for the
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students
to grow as an individual and to
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get
a
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good
job in the future by giving the
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very
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good
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education
.
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universities
have a
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different
policy for
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foreign
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students and
they
usually
take a higher
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fee
from them. The citizens of a country already pay a large amount of tax to the
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government
and
thus
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government
ensures the
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education
for their children and grandchildren.
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So
it is
totally
justified that local
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students
should pay less.

To sum up,
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universities
can charge huge
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fees
from the
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students
and the
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university
should
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make
sure that they are giving the best
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education
to the
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students
according to their wish.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Many universities charge higher fees for foreign students. Why do they do this? Do you believe that it is fair? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
339 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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