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Smartphones with Internet access installed should be banned from lectures and tutorials. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons and examples to support your response. v.1

Smartphones with Internet access installed should be banned from lectures and tutorials. Give reasons and examples to support your response. v. 1
Depending on tourism is an important source of earning money for a plethora of spots which are all over the globe, but many troubles can arise by tourism by its mismanagement. There are some pros and cons of this phenomenon in the contemporary era, which will be elaborated in the upcoming paragraphs. It is easy to comprehend why tourism comes handy on many fronts. The preponderant reason is employment as so many countries are in the whole world which are dependent on the tourist industry to run the economy. Nations like Singapore have numerous people who earn their bread and butter by getting engaged in facilitating millions of tourists who visit different attractions there. Additionally, tourism gives opportunity to individuals to broaden the horizons of knowledge because by visiting famous places, routers get to know about the living standard of people along with their culture, behaviour, history and other lots of stuff. Despite these benefits, there are some surprising drawbacks of tourism. Tourists spoil the aesthetic beauty of fascinating spots where they visit. To illustrate it, not only travellers use and throw the products which they require but they also help intentionally to increase pollution as the book different modes of transport to watch these amusements. Evidence of this fact is Taj Mahal, one of the eight wonders of the world, which was once made of white marbles, has been getting black just because tourists drive private vehicles around it to enjoy its beauty. Besides, travellers spread some infectious diseases, when they travel from one place to another to see places. There might be few individuals who suffer from contagious health hassles which can affect other masses who come in their contact and there are so many proofs of spreading these sort of ailments by travellers such as Zika virus. Conclusively, despite the fact touring is beneficial from employment and knowledge enhancement perspective, it has detrimental effects on beauty of fabulous spots and health of people.
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is an
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source of earning money for a plethora of spots which are all over the globe,
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but
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many
troubles can arise by
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tourism
by its mismanagement. There are
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some
pros and cons of this phenomenon in the contemporary era, which will
be elaborated
in the upcoming paragraphs.

It is easy to comprehend why
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tourism
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comes
handy on
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many
fronts. The preponderant reason is employment as
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so
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many
countries are in the whole world which are dependent on the
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tourist
industry to run the economy. Nations like Singapore have numerous
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people
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who
earn their bread and butter by getting engaged in facilitating millions of
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tourists
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who
visit
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different
attractions there.
Additionally
,
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tourism
gives opportunity to individuals to broaden the horizons of knowledge
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because
by visiting
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famous
places, routers
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get
to know about the living standard of
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people
along with their culture,
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, history and other lots of stuff.

Despite these benefits, there are
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some
surprising drawbacks of
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tourism
.
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Tourists
spoil the aesthetic beauty of fascinating spots where they visit. To illustrate it, not
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only
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travellers
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use
and throw the products which they require
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but
they
also
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help
intentionally
to increase pollution as the book
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different
modes of transport to
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watch
these amusements. Evidence of this fact is Taj Mahal, one of the eight wonders of the world, which was once made of white marbles, has been getting black
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just
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because
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tourists
drive private vehicles around it to enjoy its beauty.
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,
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travellers
spread
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some
infectious diseases, when they travel from one place to another to
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see
places. There might be few individuals
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who
suffer from contagious health hassles which can affect other masses
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who
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come
in their contact and there are
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so
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many
proofs of spreading
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these sort
of ailments by
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travellers
such as Zika virus.

Conclusively
, despite the fact touring is beneficial from employment and knowledge enhancement perspective, it has detrimental effects on beauty of fabulous spots and health of
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people
.
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IELTS essay Smartphones with Internet access installed should be banned from lectures and tutorials. Give reasons and examples to support your response. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
326 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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