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Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.15

Smacking children is the best form of discipline. v. 15
Many people believe in the age-old practice of spanking children in order to teach them. Personally, I disagree with the idea of teaching young ones through punishment, because I believe that implementing others ways of controlling them will serve for the general good. Inflicting pain to the children is not the best way to ingrain rules and manners. The little ones, out of curiosity, which is their natural instinct, can be a troublemaker. Beating them, in reality puts an end to their curious behaviour. This, in turn, has several repercussions on brain development as the child might live in the fear of one's parents. Further, such kids might conceive their parents as evil, become stubborn and sometimes isolate themselves from their family. For instance, there have been reported cases in which children commit suicide out of the fear of the punishment they might receive from their parents. Nevertheless, I believe that alternative discipline strategies such as creating consequences for both good and unruly behaviours. This can only be developed by spending time with the child by understanding their physiology. For instance, taking away the favourite bedtime snack or toy as a result of unfinished dinner could be one method to show direct outcomes of bad behaviour. Praising good etiquettes of a toddler by rewarding with gift or complement is another way. Overall, linking a result directly to the conduct can induce a response that choices have direct consequences. In conclusion, I believe that it is entirely preposterous to hit a child to regulate him or her. Instead, inventing non lethal ways to tackle a youngster is a better way to discipline.
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ones
through punishment,
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believe
that implementing others
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ways
of controlling them will serve for the general
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good
.

Inflicting pain to the children is not the best
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way
to ingrain
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rules
and manners. The
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little
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ones
, out of curiosity, which is their natural instinct, can be a troublemaker. Beating them, in reality puts an
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end
to their curious
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behaviour
. This, in turn, has several repercussions on brain development as the child might
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live
in the fear of one's parents.
Further
, such kids might conceive their parents as evil, become stubborn and
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sometimes
isolate themselves from their family.
For instance
, there have
been reported
cases in which children commit suicide out of the fear of the punishment they might receive from their parents.

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, I
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believe
that alternative discipline strategies such as creating consequences for both
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good
and
unruly
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behaviours
. This can
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only
be developed
by spending time with the child by understanding their physiology.
For instance
, taking away the
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favourite
bedtime snack or toy
as a result
of unfinished dinner could be one method to
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show
direct outcomes of
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bad
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behaviour
. Praising
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good
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etiquettes
of a toddler by rewarding with gift or complement is another
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.
Overall
, linking a result
directly
to the conduct can induce a response that choices have direct consequences.

In conclusion
, I
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believe
that it is
entirely
preposterous to hit a child to regulate him or her.
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non lethal
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ways
to tackle a youngster is a better
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way
to discipline.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Smacking children is the best form of discipline. v. 15

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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