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Since most information about culture and history can be found on the internet, museums are not needed anymore. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.6

Since most information about culture and history can be found on the internet, museums are not needed anymore. v. 6
It is a true that nowadays, anyone can browse the internet about history and different cultures. While peoples' interest in museums and art has declined and can be allowed to be extinct. I differ with this phenomenon and in the ensuing paragraphs I will allude to these arguments further. To begin with, museums are showing past event and historical artefacts. That is the reason why museums should not vanish. There are a lot of original photos, drawings, and special things available. By visiting ones, people see physically and understand the actual size and beauty of the artefacts or sculptures. For example, Maharaja Fateh Sing Museum has a huge collection of sculptures in marble and bronze. In addition the fees collected from visitors of museums would increase the revenue of the government. It is not only a source of income for the government, but also provides entertainment for some people. Thus, museums are required for people and nation. Conversely, the online media has all the clue about the past and our culture. It only provides photos which most of the time are not enough to understand the reality of sculptures and painting. For instance, Victoria Memorial, Kolkata, has Queen Victoria Statue made in the 19th century, you have to see it in person. Photos on the screen can never give an accurate idea of the size. Moreover, every information available on the internet may not be true as some websites put up wrong data for their benefit. Hence, visiting the museum can never be replaced by just reading about it online. To conclude, the internet is an easily available and free way of getting info about ones past and culture, it cannot be replaced by visiting the museums in person and it does not allow one physically.
It is a true that nowadays, anyone can browse the internet about history and
different
cultures. While peoples' interest in
museums
and art has declined and can be
allowed
to be extinct. I differ with this phenomenon and in the ensuing paragraphs I will allude to these arguments
further
.

To
begin
with,
museums
are showing past
event
and historical
artefacts
.
That is
the reason why
museums
should not vanish. There are
a lot of
original photos, drawings, and special things available. By visiting
ones
,
people
see
physically
and understand the actual size and beauty of the
artefacts
or sculptures.
For example
,
Maharaja
Fateh
Sing
Museum
has a huge collection of sculptures in marble and bronze. In
addition
the fees collected from visitors of
museums
would increase the revenue of the
government
. It is not
only
a source of income for the
government
,
but
also
provides entertainment for
some
people
.
Thus
,
museums
are required
for
people
and nation.

Conversely
, the online media has all the clue about the past and our culture. It
only
provides photos which most of the time are not
enough
to understand the reality of sculptures and painting.
For instance
, Victoria Memorial, Kolkata, has Queen Victoria Statue made in the 19th century, you
have to
see
it in person. Photos on the screen can never give an accurate
idea
of the size.
Moreover
, every information available on the internet may not be true as
some
websites put up
wrong
data for their benefit.
Hence
, visiting the
museum
can never
be replaced
by
just
reading about it online.

To conclude
, the internet is an
easily
available and free way of getting info about
ones
past and culture, it cannot
be replaced
by visiting the
museums
in person and it does not
allow
one
physically
.
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IELTS essay Since most information about culture and history can be found on the internet, museums are not needed anymore. v. 6

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  American English
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296 words
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