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Since most information about culture and history can be found on the internet, museums are not needed anymore. To what extent do you agree? v.3

Since most information about culture and history can be found on the internet, museums are not needed anymore. v. 3
Nowadays, internet has the vast amount of information from culture and history. There are some arguments about museum that they are redundant But, I utterly disagree with this statement. Therefore, I will discuss in further paragraphs about a certain assent. To begin with, undoubtedly, online platforms have the huge data about artefacts but, seeing museums in physical manner it’s a different and realistic experience. For example, folks can see the statue of unity via internet, but watching in online encyclopedia does not provide you the accurate practical experience. You cannot predict the exact measurements. Watch an image and seeing directly in realistic approach, provides a diverse attributes. The internet gives an accurate knowledge, but you feel that’s its insufficient and does not issue contentment. Secondly, museum can help in revenue of government. With ticket amount museum can be transformed in refurbished building and aid the government. Anyone can envisage about paintings and artefacts by internet, but they did not get the insightful experience. For instance, if museum is surrounded by shops, cafes, and restaurants their pursuit can bring people to them and people can buy the small antiques and can have the meal in a restaurant and it will aid the owner and employee. Museum has the archaic antiques and paintings, these are very salient & essential for the nation's prestige. All the antiques have the special dignity. However, efforts must be made for integrity of museums, art galleries and they should also refurbished by the country to boost the economy and beneficial for people. To conclude, a nation’s historical and cultural treasures abound in museums. Therefore, there must be maintained and it cannot be replaced by visiting the museum in person.
Nowadays, internet has the vast amount of information from culture and history. There are
some
arguments about
museum
that they are redundant
But
, I
utterly
disagree with this statement.
Therefore
, I will discuss in
further
paragraphs about a certain assent.

To
begin
with,
undoubtedly
, online platforms have the huge data about
artefacts
but
, seeing
museums
in physical manner it’s a
different
and realistic experience.
For example
, folks can
see
the statue of unity via internet,
but
watching in online encyclopedia does not provide you the accurate practical experience. You cannot predict the exact measurements.
Watch
an image and seeing
directly
in realistic approach, provides a diverse
attributes
. The internet gives an accurate knowledge,
but
you feel that’s its insufficient and does not issue contentment.

Secondly
,
museum
can
help
in revenue of
government
. With ticket amount
museum
can
be transformed
in refurbished building and aid the
government
. Anyone can envisage about paintings and
artefacts
by internet,
but
they did not
get
the insightful experience.
For instance
, if
museum
is surrounded
by shops,
cafes
, and restaurants their pursuit can bring
people
to them and
people
can
buy
the
small
antiques and can have the meal in a restaurant and it will aid the owner and employee.
Museum
has the archaic antiques and paintings, these are
very
salient & essential for the nation's prestige. All the antiques have the special dignity.
However
, efforts
must
be made
for integrity of
museums
, art
galleries and
they should
also
refurbished
by the country to boost the economy and beneficial for
people
.

To conclude
, a nation’s historical and cultural treasures abound in
museums
.
Therefore
, there
must
be maintained
and it cannot
be replaced
by visiting the
museum
in person.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Since most information about culture and history can be found on the internet, museums are not needed anymore. v. 3

Essay
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4 paragraphs
282 words
6.5
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