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Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth and resources among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizen themselves?

Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth and resources among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizen themselves? v. 1
The inequality cause arguments about sharing wealthy such as food, education etc between nations. while some people claim that the responsibility of poorness of nations belong the own goverments. Other group think that wealthy nations should share their sources, and I agree with this point of view. First of all, the wealthy nations should help to others, because it is a necessary of human being. They and all members of nations are human. As people, we should deal with compensating basic requirements of living people on earth. Besides, to give support to other will give happiness for given side. In addition, even if we asset the case as pragmatistic view, the wealthy nations should share their wealth with poor nations. Becuase of reason that it is a reality terror can be occured in poor countries. It effects all the country and global economy. So wealthy countries are effected as negaitive. Another threat is immigration from poor nations to rich ones for wealthy societies. It causes huge problems for rich nations. On the other hand, some people insist on the responsibility is on own goverment. The people have mainly two view. One of them is the poor nations should warn the goverment, according to the view the problem can be solved just by nations demands. And second one is the goverments of poor nations are independent so another authority shouldn’t do anything. In conclusion, although a group of people claim that poor nations should solve own problems with their goverments, it will be more appropiate to share wealth with poor nations for all nations.
The inequality cause arguments about sharing
wealthy
such as food, education etc between
nations
.
while
some
people
claim that the responsibility of poorness of
nations
belong the
own
goverments
.
Other
group
think
that
wealthy
nations
should share their sources, and I
agree
with this point of view.

First of all
, the
wealthy
nations
should
help
to others,
because
it is a necessary of human being. They and all members of
nations
are human. As
people
, we should deal with compensating basic requirements of living
people
on earth.
Besides
, to give support to
other
will give happiness for
given
side.

In addition
, even if
we asset
the case as
pragmatistic
view, the
wealthy
nations
should share their wealth with
poor
nations
.
Becuase
of reason that it is a reality terror can be
occured
in
poor
countries. It effects all the country and global economy.
So
wealthy
countries
are effected
as
negaitive
. Another threat is immigration from
poor
nations
to rich ones for
wealthy
societies. It causes huge problems for rich nations.

On the
other
hand,
some
people
insist on the responsibility is on
own
goverment
. The
people
have
mainly
two view. One of them is the
poor
nations
should warn the
goverment
, according to the view the problem can
be solved
just
by
nations
demands. And second one is the
goverments
of
poor
nations
are independent
so
another authority shouldn’t do anything.

In conclusion
, although a group of
people
claim that
poor
nations
should solve
own
problems with their
goverments
, it will be more
appropiate
to share wealth with
poor
nations
for all
nations
.
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IELTS essay Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth and resources among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizen themselves?

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  American English
5 paragraphs
263 words
5.5
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