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Should private schools receive government funding? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.5

Should private schools receive government funding? v. 5
In recent years, people argue whether private should receive funding from the Government. In my opinion, the Government will spend more money on their schools and downsizing the private schools as much as possible. To begin with, private schools charge more money from parents in terms of improving their infrastructure, smart class training and like many things. This is because the Government schools' education and quality are questionable. Therefore, parents have taken care of children's education seriously and they do not have to hesitate to spend much money. If the Government concerns and spend more money on their schools and improving standards, parents will prefer the Government schools as their first choice for their children's education. For instance, Australia and Canada like many developed countries have no private schools and provide education through their schools only to the children. Secondly, in India like many developing countries, peoples' income is very less. However, private schools have overlooked them and making business over their children's education. Moreover, the outcome of children's education also questionable. Therefore, the Government should keep an eye on them and pass restrictions to control them in all their values. Consequently, they will further give a good education with values to the children and also charge reasonable money from their parents. For instance, the Indian Government has recently passed the law that the private schools should follow only the fee structure which has been created by the Government. To conclude, education is cost-less thing and one of the rights for all human beings, so the developing countries must run the education on their own and completely remove the privatization as soon as possible.
In recent years,
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argue whether
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should receive funding from the
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. In my opinion, the
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will spend more
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money
on their
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schools
and downsizing the
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private
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schools
as much as possible.

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begin
with,
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charge more
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from
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in terms of improving their infrastructure, smart
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class
training and like
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things. This is
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schools'
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education
and quality are questionable.
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,
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parents
have taken care of
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children's
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education
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seriously and
they do not
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have to
hesitate to spend much
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money
. If the
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concerns and spend more
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money
on their
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schools
and improving standards,
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parents
will prefer the
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Government
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schools
as their
first
choice for their
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children's
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education
.
For instance
, Australia and Canada like
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many
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developed countries
have no
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private
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schools
and provide
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education
through their
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schools
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only
to the children.

Secondly
, in India like
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developing countries
, peoples' income is
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less.
However
,
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have overlooked them and making business over their
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children's
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education
.
Moreover
, the outcome of
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children's
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education
also
questionable.
Therefore
, the
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should
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keep
an eye on them and pass restrictions to control them in all their values.
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, they will
further
give a
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good
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education
with values to the children and
also
charge reasonable
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money
from their
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parents
.
For instance
, the Indian
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Government
has recently passed the law that the
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private
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schools
should follow
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only
the fee structure which has
been created
by the
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Government
.

To conclude
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is cost
-less thing and one of the rights for all human beings,
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so
the
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developing countries
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must
run the
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education
on their
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own
and completely remove the privatization as
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soon
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IELTS essay Should private schools receive government funding? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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Grammatical Range: 8.0
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