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Should animals be used in testing new drugs and procedures? v.1

Should animals be used in testing new drugs and procedures? v. 1
Every year, millions of animals undergo painful suffering or death as a result of scientific research into the effects of drugs, food additives, cosmetics and other chemical products. While most people think animal testing is necessary, others are upset by what they see as needless suffering. This essay looks at some of the positive and negative aspects of animal testing. Many medical treatments and procedures have been developed from experiments on animals. Since animals share many features with humans, scientists use animals to test the safety and effectiveness of newly developed drugs before pilot testing on small groups of patients. Medical teams practice new operating techniques such as transplants on animals. Without animal testing, many procedures or new drugs would be extremely unsafe. However, many people are concerned that animals are suffering unnecessarily and cruelly. They do not believe that every new drug needs to be tested on animals as humans have the huge database of knowledge and modern computer models that can be used instead of the animals. They particularly feel that animal testing should not be used for non-essential products such as cosmetics, shampoos, soaps, and cleaning products. Furthermore, some campaigners would like to see certain tests replaced and more humane methods used. In conclusion, we need to make sure that the millions of animals who are used for testing new products are treated with the minimum of suffering. Although some animal testing may be unavoidable at present, treating our fellow creatures as mercifully as possible will demonstrate our humanity.
Every year, millions of
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animals
undergo painful
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suffering
or death
as a result
of scientific research into the effects of
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drugs
, food additives, cosmetics and other chemical
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products
. While most
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people
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think
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animal
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testing
is necessary, others
are upset
by what they
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see
as needless
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suffering
. This essay looks at
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some of the
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positive
and
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negative
aspects of
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animal
testing.

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Many
medical treatments and procedures have
been developed
from experiments on
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animals
. Since
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animals
share
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many
features with humans, scientists
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use
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animals
to
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test
the safety and effectiveness of
newly
developed
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drugs
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before
pilot
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testing
on
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small
groups of patients. Medical teams practice
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new
operating techniques such as transplants on
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animals
. Without
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animal
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testing
,
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many
procedures or
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new
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drugs
would be
extremely
unsafe.

However
,
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many
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people
are concerned
that
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animals
are
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suffering
unnecessarily
and
cruelly
. They do not believe that every
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new
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drug
needs to be
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tested
on
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animals
as humans have the huge database of knowledge and modern computer models that can be
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used
instead
of the
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animals
. They
particularly
feel that
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animal
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testing
should not be
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used
for non-essential
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products
such as cosmetics, shampoos, soaps, and cleaning
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products
.
Furthermore
,
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some
campaigners would like to
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see
certain
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tests
replaced and more humane methods
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used
.

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, we need to
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make
sure that the millions of
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animals
who are
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used
for
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testing
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new
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products
are treated
with the minimum of
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suffering
. Although
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some
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animal
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testing
may be unavoidable at present, treating our fellow creatures as
mercifully
as possible will demonstrate our humanity.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Should animals be used in testing new drugs and procedures? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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