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Should a city try to preserve its old, historic building or destroy them and replace them with modern buildings? What is your viewpoint on this issue? v.2

Should a city try to preserve its old, historic building or destroy them and replace them with modern buildings? What is your viewpoint on this issue? v. 2
There are many common issues, such as traffic jam, air pollution, unemployment, et al, which most cities are sharing these days. Metropolises: Istanbul, Rome, Napoli, London, Madrid, Paris, etc. , also have to deal with historic and antique constructions on top of those issues. Engineers assert old, historic buildings have to be demolished in terms of safety standards; however, the metropolises’ authorities preserve the buildings for certain reasons. Historic and old buildings can be devastating in case of emergency situations. According to WHO (World Health Organization) statistics, relatively more people die in earthquakes in Napoli than in Japanese cities despite the same magnitude of the cataclysm and density of residents in the cities. This discrepancy occurs due to the fact that there are significantly more old buildings in Napoli, whereas most architecture are modern and correspond to safety standards in Japanese cities. Moreover, old buildings have substantially less occupancy capacity than modern ones, although they cover the same field, historic mansions can even spread to more area, as modern constructions. Therefore, a city should substitute antique architecture for newer ones in order to reside its increasing population. Thus, it seems there are more reasons to destroy than to keep all old and historic buildings due to fragility and lack of residence capacity. Nevertheless, cities’ authorities preserve old and historic architecture in terms of heritage, tourism, and business. Some cities are recognized by their ancient architecture inherited from ancestors. For instance, Istanbul cannot be mixed up with other cities due to its unique architecture, mostly by mosques and temples built hundreds years ago. Also, cities with ancient constructions are attracted by millions of tourists all over the world. Rome, for example, is visited by nearly 5 million tourists who seek the spirit of ancient Roman Empire and contemplate antique Roman architecture. Lastly, old, historic buildings are a profitable opportunity for construction companies. Thousands of historic buildings are closed for refurbishment yearly to renovate and strengthen constructions. Old, historic buildings are our heritage, therefore, it is imperative that they be preserved since new technologies allow to reinforce them to withstand against natural cataclysms.
There are
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many
common issues, such as traffic jam, air pollution, unemployment,
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et al
, which most
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cities
are sharing these days. Metropolises: Istanbul, Rome,
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Napoli
, London, Madrid, Paris, etc.
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,
also
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have to
deal with
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historic
and antique
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constructions
on top of those issues. Engineers assert
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old
,
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historic
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buildings
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have to
be demolished
in terms of safety standards;
however
, the metropolises’ authorities preserve the
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buildings
for certain reasons.

Historic and
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old
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buildings
can be devastating in case of emergency situations. According to
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WHO
(World Health Organization) statistics,
relatively
more
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people
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die
in earthquakes in
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Napoli
than in Japanese
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cities
despite the same magnitude of the cataclysm and density of residents in the
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cities
. This discrepancy occurs due to the fact that there are
significantly
more
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old
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buildings
in
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Napoli
, whereas most
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architecture
are modern and correspond to safety standards in Japanese
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cities
.
Moreover
,
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old
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buildings
have
substantially
less occupancy capacity than modern ones, although they cover the same field,
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historic
mansions can even spread to more area, as modern
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constructions
.
Therefore
, a city should substitute antique
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architecture
for newer ones in order to reside its increasing population.
Thus
, it seems there are more reasons to
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destroy
than to
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keep
all
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old
and
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historic
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buildings
due to fragility and lack of residence capacity.

Nevertheless
,
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cities’
authorities preserve
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old
and
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historic
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architecture
in terms of heritage, tourism, and business.
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Some
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cities
are recognized
by their ancient
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architecture
inherited from ancestors.
For instance
, Istanbul cannot
be mixed
up with other
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cities
due to its unique
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architecture
,
mostly
by mosques and temples built hundreds years ago.
Also
,
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cities
with ancient
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constructions
are attracted
by millions of tourists all over the world. Rome,
for example
,
is visited
by
nearly
5 million tourists who seek the spirit of ancient Roman Empire and contemplate antique Roman
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architecture
.
Lastly
,
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old
,
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historic
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buildings
are a profitable opportunity for
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construction
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companies
. Thousands of
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historic
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buildings
are closed
for refurbishment yearly to renovate and strengthen constructions.

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Old
,
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historic
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buildings
are our heritage,
therefore
, it is imperative that they
be preserved
since new technologies
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allow
to reinforce them to withstand against natural cataclysms.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Should a city try to preserve its old, historic building or destroy them and replace them with modern buildings? What is your viewpoint on this issue? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
351 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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