Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

SHOULD A CITY TRY TO PRESERVE ITS OLD, HISTORIC BUILDINGS OR DESTROY THEM AND REPLACE THEM WITH MODERN BUILDINGS? USE SPECIFIC REASONS AND EXAMPLES TO SUPPORT YOUR OPINION. v.9

SHOULD A CITY TRY TO PRESERVE ITS OLD, HISTORIC BUILDINGS OR DESTROY THEM AND REPLACE THEM WITH MODERN BUILDINGS? USE SPECIFIC REASONS AND EXAMPLES TO SUPPORT YOUR OPINION. v. 9
Development in any field indicates sign of progress. Similarly infrastructure of city improves with the development of new buildings and premises. However many argue to retain the old buildings due to its historical importance. It is incomprehensible whether to remove historical buildings by building new ones as both have their distinct benefits and importance. In my opinion, it is better for cities to build new buildings to cop up with the rapidly evolving world. Firstly, constructing new building would improve over all architecture and infrastructure of the city because modern designs and patterns would be used. For instance Dubai, a well-developed city of opportunities has recently completed construction of World’s biggest mall; it has more than 1800 stores to facilitate citizens and visitors, that offer’s versatile collection of clothing and International brands. Many restaurants and saloons are also included in the directory of mall. Moreover, it has become must visit place of Dubai for the tourists due to its exquisite features and having its name in Genius book of the world. Secondly, new building would require low maintenance but provide ancillary facilities require by building owners such as parking, Lifts and escalators rather than staircases. It would also help many international companies to build their offices in the city that would enhance businesses and employment opportunities. Government would earn more revenue due to industrial and corporate developments. Adding to it, residence would get options of purchasing modern and fancy houses. New buildings would have enough parking spaces that will discourage people to park anywhere in the city. Historical buildings have different aesthetic value but they are difficult to maintain. Also it would require healthy sum of money periodically. On the other hand, new buildings would have all numerous hi tech facilities at the cost of less efforts and resources to maintain it.
Development in any field indicates
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sign
of progress.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Similarly
infrastructure of city
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improves
with the development of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
and premises.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
However
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
argue to retain the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
due to its historical importance. It is incomprehensible whether to remove historical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
ones as both have their distinct benefits and importance. In my opinion, it is better for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
to build
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
to cop up with the
rapidly
evolving world.

Firstly
, constructing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
over all architecture and infrastructure of the city
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
modern designs and patterns would be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
.
For instance
Dubai, a well-developed city of opportunities has recently completed construction of World’s biggest mall; it has more than 1800 stores to facilitate citizens and visitors, that offer’s versatile collection of clothing and International brands.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
restaurants and saloons are
also
included in the directory of mall.
Moreover
, it has become
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
visit place of Dubai for the tourists due to its exquisite features and having its name in Genius book of the world.

Secondly
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
would require low maintenance
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
provide ancillary facilities require by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
owners such as parking, Lifts and escalators
rather
than staircases. It would
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
international
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
to build their offices in the city that would enhance businesses and employment opportunities.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
would earn more revenue due to industrial and corporate developments. Adding to it, residence would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
options of purchasing modern and fancy
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
New
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
would have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
parking spaces that will discourage
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to park anywhere in the city.

Historical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
aesthetic value
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
they are difficult to maintain.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Also
it would require healthy sum of money
periodically
.
On the other hand
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
would have all numerous hi tech facilities at the cost of
Did you mean "fewer"? The noun efforts is countable.
less
efforts and resources to maintain it.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay SHOULD A CITY TRY TO PRESERVE ITS OLD, HISTORIC BUILDINGS OR DESTROY THEM AND REPLACE THEM WITH MODERN BUILDINGS? USE SPECIFIC REASONS AND EXAMPLES TO SUPPORT YOUR OPINION. v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts