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Shops should give preference in selling local food rather than imported food. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Shops should give preference in selling local food rather than imported food. v. 1
It is a matter of debate whether local food products should be sold or imported ones by the vendors. It would appear that selling of imported meals is more beneficial for both the sellers and consumers. At the outset, the wiser man business person is a person who takes care of the needs of his consumers. Owing to global influence, more and more people of these days are more interested in imported food. An international brand like KFC and Mac D are the example of this trend. Also, it is because of the quality and uniqueness that could be found in certain imported food products. So, by selling imported products shopkeeper can gain huge benefits, which would not possible by selling only local brands. Thus, local people can enjoy the imported food just at their nearby market, eventually both consumer and businessmen get benefits of this selling strategy. On the other hand, distributing only local foods could lead to more competition amongst vendors. Because of its availability, local meals could be found everywhere, so it does not add any significance of the particular shop. For instance, Indian traditional food 'chapatis' is even available at home; so, why would people buy this product from the seller? That is the reason that a sense of competition could be increased to sell these products. Furthermore, local food might be spoiled due to its excess storage at stock, if it does not sell timely. Hence, the government had better export of local products to import foreign food products. To conclude, this essay discussed the reason why imported food should be sold instead of local food. I think the selling of imported food is more beneficial for the profit of sellers as well for the sake of consumer's interest.
It is a matter of debate whether
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local
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food
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products
should
be sold
or
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imported
ones by the vendors. It would appear that
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selling
of
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imported
meals is more beneficial for both the sellers and consumers.

At the outset, the wiser
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man
business person is a person who takes care of the needs of his consumers. Owing to global influence, more and more
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people
of these days are more interested in
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imported
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food
. An international brand like KFC and Mac D are the example of this trend.
Also
, it is
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because
of the quality and uniqueness that could
be found
in certain
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imported
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food
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products
.
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So
, by
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selling
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imported
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products
shopkeeper can gain huge benefits, which would not possible by
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selling
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only
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local
brands.
Thus
,
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local
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people
can enjoy the
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imported
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food
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just
at their nearby market,
eventually
both consumer and businessmen
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get
benefits of this
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selling
strategy.

On the other hand
, distributing
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only
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local
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foods
could lead to more competition amongst vendors.
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Because
of its availability,
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local
meals could
be found
everywhere,
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so
it does not
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add
any significance of the particular shop.
For instance
, Indian traditional
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food
'chapatis' is even available at home;
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so
, why would
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people
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buy
this
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product
from the seller?
That is
the reason that a sense of competition could
be increased
to sell these
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products
.
Furthermore
,
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local
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food
might
be spoiled
due to its excess storage at stock, if it does not sell timely.
Hence
, the
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government
had better export of
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local
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products
to import foreign
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food
products.

To conclude
, this essay discussed the reason why
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imported
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food
should
be sold
instead
of
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local
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food
. I
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think
the
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selling
of
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imported
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food
is more beneficial for the profit of sellers
as well
for the sake of consumer's interest.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Shops should give preference in selling local food rather than imported food. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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