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shops should give preference in selling local food rather than imported food. Do you agree or disagree v.2

shops should give preference in selling local food rather than imported food. v. 2
The fact that many languages fizzle out on a yearly basis is thought by some to be inconsequential as human existence will become easier where there are just a few languages across the globe. In my opinion, I completely agree with this view and the reasons for this will be discussed below. To start with, one major reason why living will become easier with fewer languages is that communication barrier will be broken and communication becomes more effective. For instance, where English language is the mother tongue in many more nations of the earth, then it would be a lot easier for countries to interact with each other without having to think of a language translator who may not be 100% accurate and consequently, nations can work together to achieve a common goal easily. Furthermore, another vital reason why life becomes less difficult with fewer dialects is that international trade becomes more convenient. This is so because people from different parts of the world would find it possible to relate with one another and trading is enhanced. A native English language speaker in Nigeria for instance, will find it less stressful to purchase items from a Chinese online store if the seller understands English as compared to travelling all the way to China to purchase the same goods. This will make international trading more pleasurable and enjoyable. Finally, having fewer languages will foster greater unity and peaceful coexistence for the reason that having a common dialect allows people settle conflicts and disputes easily. If countries like Nigeria with several ethnic groups with each having its own specific dialect, has just one or two languages, it would completely eradicate the devastating menace of disunity and strife arising from ethnicity and tribalism which besets the entire nation and consequently, citizens will cohabit in love and harmony making life peaceful and easy. In conclusion, I truly believe it is insignificant for more languages to go into extinction yearly owing to the fact that life will be much easier, if there are only but a few languages worldwide.
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easier
where there are
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languages
across the globe. In my opinion, I completely
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with, one major
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reason
why living will
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easier
with fewer
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languages
is that communication barrier will
be broken
and communication
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becomes
more effective.
For instance
, where English
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language
is the mother tongue in
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many
more nations of the earth, then it would be a lot
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easier
for countries to interact with each other without
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having
to
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think
of a
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language
translator who may not be 100% accurate and
consequently
, nations can work together to achieve a common goal
easily
.

Furthermore
, another vital
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reason
why life
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becomes
less difficult with fewer dialects is that international trade
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becomes
more convenient. This is
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people
from
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parts of the world would find it possible to relate with one another and trading
is enhanced
. A native English
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language
speaker in Nigeria
for instance
, will find it less stressful to
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purchase
items from a Chinese online store if the seller understands English as compared to travelling all the way to China to
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purchase
the same
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goods
. This will
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make
international trading more pleasurable and enjoyable.

Finally
,
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will foster greater unity and peaceful coexistence for the
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that
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having
a common dialect
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allows
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people
settle conflicts and disputes
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. If countries like Nigeria with several ethnic groups with each
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its
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own
specific dialect, has
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one or two
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, it would completely eradicate the devastating menace of disunity and strife arising from ethnicity and tribalism which besets the entire nation and
consequently
, citizens will cohabit in
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love
and harmony making life peaceful and easy.

In conclusion
, I
truly
believe it is insignificant for more
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languages
to go into extinction yearly owing to the fact that life will be much
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easier
, if there are
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languages
worldwide.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
You can never understand one language until you understand at least two.
Geoffrey Willans

IELTS essay shops should give preference in selling local food rather than imported food. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
344 words
7.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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