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Sending criminals to prison is not the best method of dealing with them. Education and job are better ways to help them. Do you agree or disagree. v.1

Sending criminals to prison is not the best method of dealing with them. Education and job are better ways to help them. v. 1
Dealing with criminals has always been a challenge for the police officials. The advent of technology has marked a considerable rise in the crime. To curb the issue a school of thought says that best way to deal with criminlas is to provide them education and job security rather them putting them in prison. This essay will discuss why I completely disagree with the notion including criminal minds are dangerous for society and it will be injustice to the victim. To begin with, the prominent reason why criminals are liable to be in prison is that their minds are destructive and they only know to harm people. For this reason, it is seen that if someone commits crime for single time, it becomes their habbit. To illustrate, brain mapping of criminals has shown a different pattern. Therefore, such people are highly dangerous for the society. Secondly, it is huge injustice to the victim. There are countless crimes which take place on daily basis. For instance, every day a rape case is registered, dozens of snatching takes place and people are killing each other for wealth, health and jealously. Particularly, there are people who have either lost their lives, or those who are affected mentally and physcially, and for all their relatives it will be a matter of shame if the convict is being provided with the amenities instead of punishment. To sum up, dealing with criminals is a matter of concern. This essay discussed to build a safe society and justice to the victim it is essential to keep the prisoners behind the bars.
Dealing with
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criminals
has always been a challenge for the police officials. The advent of technology has marked a considerable rise in the crime. To curb the issue a school of
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thought
says that best way to deal with
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criminlas
is to provide them education and job security
rather
them putting them in prison. This essay will discuss why I completely disagree with the notion including
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
criminal
minds are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
dangerous
for society and it will be injustice to the victim.

To
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begin
with, the prominent reason why
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
criminals
are liable to be in prison is that their minds are
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destructive and
they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
know to harm
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people
.
For this reason
, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
that if someone commits crime for single time, it becomes their
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habbit
. To illustrate, brain mapping of
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criminals
has shown a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
pattern.
Therefore
, such
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people
are
highly
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dangerous
for the society.

Secondly
, it is huge injustice to the victim. There are countless crimes which take place on daily basis.
For instance
, every day a rape case
is registered
, dozens of snatching takes place and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are killing each other for wealth, health and
jealously
.
Particularly
, there are
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people
who have either lost their
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lives
, or those who are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
mentally and
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physcially
, and for all their relatives it will be a matter of shame if the convict is
being provided
with the amenities
instead
of punishment.

To sum up, dealing with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
criminals
is a matter of concern. This essay
The verb 'discussed' is used with the gerund form: "discussed building".
discussed to build
a safe society and justice to the victim it is essential to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
the prisoners behind the bars.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Sending criminals to prison is not the best method of dealing with them. Education and job are better ways to help them. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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