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Scientists say that junk food is harmful to people s health Some say the way to ask people to eat less fast food is to educate them while others say education does not work Discuss both sides and give your own opinion v.1

Scientists say that junk food is harmful to people s health Some say the way to ask people to eat less fast food is to educate them while others say education does not work 1
In recent days, it is not an uncommon practice that few people are not aware of those who live next to them. This essay examines the causes and possible solutions for such practices. One of the greatest reasons for people not knowing their neighbours is the lack of communication and interaction. This is because, the percentage of working people in a family are more these days as compared to last few decades, which requires a family to leave to work in the morning and return only by night. These kind of routines will deprive them of a chance of socializing with others who surround them. However, if people decide to quit their jobs for a good social life, they may fail to get a good living standard. Affording a car, a good apartment, would become a luxury to them. Nevertheless, these problems can be solved by making people understand the value that neighbours can bring in. For instance, if there is a medical emergency at home, they are the ones who can come to aid at the first. Not only during those situations, they may also help us in having a decent socioeconomic life by assisting us in times of smaller economic crisis and also sharing our emotions or problems makes us feel calm and relived sometimes. In conclusion, even though people refrain from knowing their neighbours due to the demands of their jobs, they must not neglect the benefits they can bring in which help them in social growth. It is the duty of every individual to understand and realize the importance of good socioeconomic life.
In recent days, it is not an uncommon practice that few
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people
are not aware of those who
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live
next
to them. This essay examines the causes and possible solutions for such practices.

One of the greatest reasons for
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people
not knowing their
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neighbours
is the lack of communication and interaction. This is
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because
, the percentage of working
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people
in a family are more these days as compared to last few decades, which requires a family to
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leave
to work in the morning and return
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only
by night.
Did you mean "this kind" or "These kinds"?
These kind
of routines will deprive them of a chance of socializing with others who surround them.

However
, if
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people
decide to quit their jobs for a
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good
social life, they may fail to
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get
a
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good
living standard. Affording a car, a
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good
apartment, would become a luxury to them.

Nevertheless
, these problems can
be solved
by making
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people
understand the value that
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neighbours
can bring in.
For instance
, if there is a medical emergency at home, they are the ones who can
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come
to aid at the
first
. Not
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only
during those situations, they may
also
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help
us in having a decent socioeconomic life by assisting us in times of smaller economic crisis and
also
sharing our emotions or problems
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makes
us feel calm and relived
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sometimes
.

In conclusion
,
even though
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people
refrain from knowing their
Possible spelling mistake. 'neighbours' is British English.
neighbours
due to the demands of their jobs, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
not neglect the benefits they can bring in which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them in social growth. It is the duty of every individual to understand and realize the importance of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
good
socioeconomic life.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Scientists say that junk food is harmful to people s health Some say the way to ask people to eat less fast food is to educate them while others say education does not work 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
267 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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