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Scientists say that junk food is harmful to people s health Some say the way to ask people to eat less fast food is to educate them while others say education does not work Discuss both sides and give your own opinion v.2

Scientists say that junk food is harmful to people s health Some say the way to ask people to eat less fast food is to educate them while others say education does not work 2
Presently, hectic life style has forced people to depend on processed food. According to scientists, junk food has been one of the serious causes of prevailing health issues. One of optimal solutions suggested to tackle this problem is education. However, while some argue that it would not be the most effective measure. This essay discusses both opinions but is in agreement that education will not work in this case. To begin with, there are several reasons for considering education as a fundamental solution for the junk food problem. Firstly, education is commonly believed to be able to change people’s perspective on junk food. Specifically, well-educated about the negative influence of junk food on health make people aware of the risks involved with the consumption of the kind of food. To illustrate, fast foods are high in calories and low in nutrition. These foods are rich in harmful substances such as fat, salt, and sugar. Preservatives are also added in junk food and all these things can cause heart diseases, cancer, diabetes, and obesity. Educating people, consequently, increases the preference of the healthier diet over the convenience food and promotes health by keeping diseases at bay. Secondly, education is also believed to have butterfly effect, which means well-educated individuals can also educate others around them, resulting in widespread awareness of the negative effects of junk food. Nevertheless, it is true that considering education as the key answer for the problem is not justifiable. One of the main reasons is that people’s perspective is not the only element that affects their decision on choosing food for meals. By virtue of mass media, people nowadays could be well-informed of the negative influence of junk food. Though, occupied life is main culprit, which means masses usually be in a hurry and meal of junk food help them save time, leading to the increasing junk food intake. Secondly, although being aware of health problems caused by junk food, people may keep eating this kind of food as they consider cooking more of a chore than pleasure in the fast paced life. As a result, people may allow themselves to be indulged with junk food no matter what they might be warning against the kind of food. After considering the convenience of fast foods, educating people would not help. Thus, it is better making fast food healthier by restricting use of preservatives, trans-fatty acids and saturated fats. Whole wheat breads could be used instead of white breads and juices should be served along with such foods instead of carbonated drinks. To conclude, education can be a great solution for the junk food problem, but it should be implemented along with others solutions to reduce the amount of junk food consumption.
Presently
, hectic life style has forced
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people
to depend on processed
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food
. According to scientists,
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junk
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food
has been one of the serious causes of prevailing
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health
issues. One of optimal
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solutions
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suggested to tackle
this
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problem
is
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education
.
However
, while
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some
argue that it would not be the most effective measure. This essay discusses both opinions
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but
is in agreement that
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education
will not work
in this case
.

To
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begin
with, there are several reasons for considering
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education
as a fundamental
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solution
for the
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junk
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food
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problem
.
Firstly
,
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education
is
commonly
believed to be able to
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change
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people’s
perspective on
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junk
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food
.
Specifically
, well-educated about the
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negative
influence of
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junk
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food
on
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health
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make
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people
aware of the
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risks
involved with the consumption of the kind of
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food
. To illustrate,
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fast
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foods
are high in calories and low in nutrition. These
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foods
are rich in harmful substances such as
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fat
, salt, and sugar. Preservatives are
also
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added
in
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junk
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food
and all these things can cause heart diseases, cancer, diabetes, and obesity. Educating
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people
,
consequently
, increases the preference of the healthier diet over the convenience
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food
and promotes
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health
by keeping diseases at bay.
Secondly
,
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education
is
also
believed to have butterfly effect, which means well-educated individuals can
also
educate others around them, resulting in widespread awareness of the
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negative
effects of
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junk
food.

Nevertheless
, it is true that considering
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education
as the key answer for the
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problem
is not justifiable. One of the main reasons is that
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people’s
perspective is not the
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only
element that affects their decision on choosing
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food
for meals. By virtue of mass media,
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people
nowadays could be well-informed of the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
influence of
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junk
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food
. Though, occupied life is main culprit, which means masses
usually
be in a hurry and meal of
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junk
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food
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help
them save time, leading to the increasing
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junk
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food
intake.
Secondly
, although being aware of
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health
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problems
caused by
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junk
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food
,
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people
may
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keep
eating this kind of
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food
as they consider cooking more of a chore than pleasure in the
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fast
paced life.
As a result
,
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people
may
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allow
themselves to
be indulged
with
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junk
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food
no matter what they might be warning against the kind of food.

After considering the convenience of
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fast
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foods
, educating
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people
would not
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help
.
Thus
, it is better making
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fast
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food
healthier by restricting
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use
of preservatives, trans-fatty acids and saturated fats. Whole wheat breads could be
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used
instead
of white breads and juices should
be served
along with such
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foods
instead
of carbonated drinks.

To conclude
,
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education
can be a great
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solution
for the
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junk
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food
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problem
,
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but
it should
be implemented
along with others
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solutions
to
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reduce
the amount of
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junk
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food
consumption.
19Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
68Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Scientists say that junk food is harmful to people s health Some say the way to ask people to eat less fast food is to educate them while others say education does not work 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
454 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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