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Scientists believe that computers will become more intelligent than human beings. Some people find it a positive development while others think it is negative development. Discuss both points and give your own opinion v.3

Scientists believe that computers will become more intelligent than human beings. Some people find it a positive development while others think it is negative development. 3
It ought to be essential for parents to enrol in a parenting training course as it will greatly benefit their children's future life. In my opinion, I agree that parents can learn about tackling generation-gap and providing emotional support to their children through parenting seminars. The parenting workshops can teach parents why it is crucial to minimise the generation - gap and various ways to tackle it. In other words, every generation grew up in different environment setting and beliefs, as a result, they developed different behaviour and attitude. In the current day situation, there is a communication barrier between parents and their children. These workshops could target different reasons of generation-gap, thus, improving communication among various age groups. By doing this, they can bond easily with their loved ones. Finally, parents can understand the requirement of emotional support through parenting training courses. To further explain, due to an increase in competition, child development demands special attention and emotional support, which most parents fail to provide these days. For example, many suicide attempts were documented in the last few years because of poor mental health that resulted from a lack of emotional support. These workshops make parents understand the key aetiologies and possible solutions regarding one's mental health and the necessary support required. In conclusion, parenting seminars are vital as it allows parents to understand the key factors hindering a child's development, and different methods to handle them for a better outcome in their future life.
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parents
to enrol in a
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parenting
training course as it will
greatly
benefit their children's future life. In my opinion, I
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agree
that
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parents
can learn about tackling generation-gap and providing
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emotional
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support
to their children through
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parenting
seminars.

The
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parenting
workshops can teach
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parents
why it is crucial to
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minimise
the generation
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-
gap and various ways to tackle it.
In other words
, every generation grew up in
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different
environment setting and beliefs,
as a result
, they developed
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different
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behaviour
and attitude. In the
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current
day situation, there is a communication barrier between
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parents
and their children. These workshops could target
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different
reasons of generation-gap,
thus
, improving communication among various age groups. By doing this, they can bond
easily
with their
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loved
ones.

Finally
,
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parents
can understand the requirement of
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emotional
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support
through
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parenting
training courses. To
further
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explain
, due to an increase in competition, child development demands special attention and
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emotional
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support
, which most
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parents
fail to provide these days.
For example
,
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many
suicide attempts
were documented
in the last few years
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because
of poor mental health that resulted from a lack of
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emotional
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support
. These workshops
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make
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parents
understand the key
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aetiologies
and possible solutions regarding one's mental health and the necessary
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support
required.

In conclusion
,
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parenting
seminars are vital as it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allows
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parents
to understand the key factors hindering a child's development, and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
different
methods to handle them for a better outcome in their future life.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Scientists believe that computers will become more intelligent than human beings. Some people find it a positive development while others think it is negative development. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
246 words
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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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