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Scientists believe that computers will become more intelligent than human beings. Some people find it a positive development while others think it is negative development. Discuss both points and give your own opinion. v.1

Scientists believe that computers will become more intelligent than human beings. Some people find it a positive development while others think it is negative development. v. 1
Researchers are working day and night to develop new technologies, due to which concept of Artificial intelligence is becoming increasingly popular. Some people accept it as a blessing while others are taking it as a curse. In this essay, I shall discuss both the positive and negative sides and finally give my opinion. On the positive side, there are numerous advantages of computer. Nowadays, there is widespread use of computers and such other technology devices in corporate offices, hospitals, supermarkets, schools, etc. Main reasons behind its extreme usage are reduced time, cost, increased efficiency and speed. Computers can do multiple tasks easily with more efficiently and that too with less time and premium quality. For instance, robots can produce identical units in a very short time as compared to a human. Additionally, chances of rejections due to quality control are also rare against manmade things. People can save their time by computers and can spend their precious time for family and leisure. On the downside, due to increased usage of computers, the demand for labourors has been reduced dramatically which tends to increased unemployment. For instance, due to technology development in the year 2005, many employees had been removed from their offices which raised the unemployment rate by 15%. Another major drawback is people getting stuck behind computers due to which the rate of computer fatigue increased. However, there are numerous ways to reduce negative impacts. It is irrefutable that advantages of computers outweigh its disadvantages. Computers are made by human and it also requires human interaction to complete any task. Human has emotions, they can motivate, inspire and give directions which computers can’t. Furthermore, computers can’t stimulate. Therefore, computers can never replace the human being. In conclusion, I would like to reiterate that there are infinite benefits of computer technology against a few disadvantages.
Researchers are working day and night to develop new
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due
to which concept of Artificial intelligence is becoming
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accept it as a blessing while others are taking it as a curse. In this essay, I shall discuss both the
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positive
and
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negative
sides and
finally
give my opinion.

On the
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positive
side, there are numerous advantages of computer. Nowadays, there is widespread
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use
of computers and such other
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technology
devices in corporate offices, hospitals, supermarkets, schools, etc. Main reasons behind its extreme usage are
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reduced
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time
, cost,
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increased
efficiency and speed. Computers can do multiple tasks
easily
with more
efficiently
and that too with less
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time
and premium quality.
For instance
, robots can produce identical units in a
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very
short
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time
as compared to a
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human
.
Additionally
, chances of rejections
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due
to quality control are
also
rare against
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manmade
things.
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People
can save their
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time
by computers and can spend their precious
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time
for family and leisure.

On the downside,
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due
to
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increased
usage of computers, the demand for
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labourors
has been
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reduced
dramatically
which tends to
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increased
unemployment.
For instance
,
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due
to
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technology
development in the year 2005,
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many
employees had
been removed
from their offices which raised the unemployment rate by 15%. Another major drawback is
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people
getting stuck behind computers
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due
to which the rate of computer fatigue
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increased
.
However
, there are numerous ways to
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reduce
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negative
impacts.

It is irrefutable that advantages of computers outweigh its disadvantages. Computers
are made
by
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human
and it
also
requires
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human
interaction to complete any task.
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Human
has emotions, they can motivate, inspire and give directions which computers can’t.
Furthermore
, computers can’t stimulate.
Therefore
, computers can never replace the
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human
being.

In conclusion
, I would like to reiterate that there are infinite benefits of computer
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technology
against a few disadvantages.
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IELTS essay Scientists believe that computers will become more intelligent than human beings. Some people find it a positive development while others think it is negative development. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
305 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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