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Scientists believe computers will become more intelligent than human beings Some people think the development have a positive impact others think it is negative To what extend do you agree or disagree v.2

Scientists believe computers will become more intelligent than human beings Some people think the development have a positive impact others think it is negative v. 2
It is true that, after several decades of development, computer technology has reached an unprecedented prosperity and it is likely to continue improving in the future. After AlphaGo, a super computer as well as a virtual chess player, defeated the most brilliant player, it became a consensus that the intelligence of computers will exceed humans’. From my perspective, although it may cause some problems and concerns, it will be beneficial to individuals and society as a whole. On the one hand, increasingly smart computers enable to solve some important problems which are too complicated to tackle by human being. Undoubtedly, regardless of the fact that human beings have evolved several times in the long history, we still fail to address many scientific and medical problems. For example, various diseases such as cancers are still cannot be eliminated. It is more likely for computers which possess a powerful calculation ability to accomplish these problems. On the other hand, developments of computers’ intelligence also contribute to humans’ convenience. It is not difficult to image that the smarter computers can help and even replace humans to do some boring work, such as packing, delivering, driving and so on. It is reported, recently, many big technology companies have the plan to develop and test non-driver cars, which can release humans on the roads and reduce the rate of traffic accidents. It is admittedly that computers, with higher intelligence, may lead to some problems in our society. Firstly, due to the increasing smart and complex computer system, it is hard for authorities to regular and oversee the Internet. In addition, the replacing of human labors will inevitably result in the unemployment. In conclusion, there is not any denying that computers are becoming more intelligent than us. While I believe, with suitable regulations in confining the use of supercomputer, more benefits than problems will surface with this trend.
It is true that, after several decades of development, computer technology has reached an unprecedented prosperity and it is likely to continue improving in the future. After
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AlphaGo
, a super computer
as well
as a virtual chess player, defeated the most brilliant player, it became a consensus that the intelligence of computers will exceed
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humans’
. From my perspective, although it may cause
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some
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problems
and concerns, it will be beneficial to individuals and society as a whole.

On the one hand,
increasingly
smart computers enable to solve
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some
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important
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problems
which are too complicated to tackle by
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human
being.
Undoubtedly
, regardless of the fact that
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human
beings have evolved several times in the long history, we
still
fail to address
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many
scientific and medical
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problems
.
For example
, various diseases such as cancers are
still
cannot
be eliminated
. It is more likely for computers which possess a powerful calculation ability to accomplish these problems.

On the other hand
, developments of computers’ intelligence
also
contribute to
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humans’
convenience. It is not difficult to image that the smarter computers can
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help
and even replace
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humans
to do
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some
boring work, such as packing, delivering, driving and
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so
on. It
is reported
, recently,
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many
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big
technology
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companies
have the plan to develop and
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test
non-driver cars, which can release
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humans
on the roads and
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reduce
the rate of traffic accidents.

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It
is
admittedly
that computers, with higher intelligence, may lead to
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some
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problems
in our society.
Firstly
, due to the increasing smart and complex computer system, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
for authorities to regular and oversee the Internet.
In addition
, the replacing of
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human
labors will
inevitably
result in the unemployment.

In conclusion
, there is not any denying that computers are becoming more intelligent than us. While I believe, with suitable regulations in confining the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of supercomputer, more benefits than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
will surface with this trend.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Scientists believe computers will become more intelligent than human beings Some people think the development have a positive impact others think it is negative v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
312 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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