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science could help people live up to 100 or 200 years even would that be a good or bad development Discuss both views and give your opinion v.1

science could help people live up to 100 or 200 years even would that be a good or bad development 1
We can clearly observe how numbers of traveller are increasing when compared to the past. As there are various reasons behind this trend and this essay shall discuss them along with the advantages to the wanderers. One of the significant reasons for travelling is that the people fancy spending quality time with a family. This can be because the members of a family may tend to be stuck to the daily routine and hardly get time for one another. For example, in today’s scenario, both the parents choose to work to meet the ends of a family. As a result, when compared to the old times, when a mother used to be a homemaker, the children might not get to interact with any or both the parents as much as they should. Not only quality time but also an easy monthly EMI option can allow the middle-class travellers to explore new places while maintaining the budget. The most important positive impact of travelling is stress relief. As individuals stay away from job and their home for some time, it can act as a stress buster. To explain this, the doctors who serve patients day in and out, might get exhausted and feel much better when they take a little travel break. Apart from this, travelling can make these people observe and appreciate new cultures and traditions of various places. To add more, the children especially can enjoy at the theme parks, zoos or aquariums. In conclusion, as availability of the finance options and also to spend a quality time with the loved ones can make the people travel more than in earlier times, this act helps people to relieve stress and take a glance at other people’s culture.
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observe how numbers of
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are increasing when compared to the past. As there are various reasons behind this trend and this essay shall discuss them along with the advantages to the wanderers.

One of the significant reasons for travelling is that the
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people
fancy spending quality
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time
with a family. This can be
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because
the members of a family may tend to
be stuck
to the daily routine and hardly
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time
for one another.
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today
’s scenario, both the parents choose to work to
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the ends of a family.
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times
, when a mother
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used
to be a homemaker, the children might not
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to interact with any or both the parents as much as they should. Not
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quality
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allow
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to explore new places while maintaining the budget.

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impact of travelling is
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stress
relief. As individuals stay away from job and their home for
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time
, it can act as a
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buster. To
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this, the doctors who serve patients day in and out, might
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exhausted and feel much better when they take a
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little
travel break. Apart from this, travelling can
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these
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people
observe and appreciate new cultures and traditions of various places. To
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add
more, the children
especially
can enjoy at the theme parks, zoos or aquariums.

In conclusion
, as availability of the finance options and
also
to spend a quality
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time
with the
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loved
ones can
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people
travel more than in earlier
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, this act
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helps
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people
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and take a glance at other
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people’s
culture.
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IELTS essay science could help people live up to 100 or 200 years even would that be a good or bad development 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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