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Schools in some countries require their students to wear a uniform. What are the positives and negatives of this rule? v.1

Schools in some countries require their students to wear a uniform. What are the positives and negatives of this rule? v. 1
No one can deny that uniforms are really essential for schools and have also advantages and disadvantages. This essay will discuss the arguments supporting the main benefits and disadvantages of wearing a uniform. On the one hand, many people believe that wearing a uniform at school has many positive aspects. The most important is that it keeps the reputation of schools as it makes it more prestigious and more appealing to parents. For instance. One high-school from the USA is well-known for its discipline and an increasing number of parents struggle to enrol their children. As a result, well-organized schools are more preferred than the others. Another advantage is that uniforms distinct students between schools. To illustrate, In the UK every school, even nursery, has their own outfit. On the other hand, there are also some disadvantages. Firstly, children from low-income families might not afford tu purchase the clothing. For example, in Romania, poor students stay at home until their families have enough money to buy it. Therefore, children might fall behind studies. Secondly, some school uniforms can be uncomfortable because most of them are not designed to fit to various weather conditions. The best example, is Alexandru-Ioan high-school from Romania, which requires their students to wear a skirt and a white shirt. Consequently, children freeze during the winter. To draw a conclusion, it seems to me that reputation and distinction among schools are the main advantages of dressing up a uniform, While students face also drawbacks, suck as, a lack of affordability and comfort.
No one can deny that
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uniforms
are
really
essential for
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schools
and have
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advantages and disadvantages. This essay will discuss the arguments supporting the main benefits and disadvantages of wearing a uniform.

On the one hand,
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believe that wearing a
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positive
aspects. The most
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important
is that it
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keeps
the reputation of
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as it
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makes
it more prestigious and more appealing to parents.
For instance
. One high-school from the USA is well-known for its discipline and an increasing number of parents struggle to enrol their
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children
.
As a result
, well-organized
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schools
are more preferred than the others. Another advantage is that
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uniforms
distinct
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students
between
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schools
. To illustrate, In the UK every
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school
, even nursery, has their
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own
outfit.

On the other hand
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disadvantages.
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,
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children
from low-income families might not afford
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purchase
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, in Romania, poor
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students
stay at home until their families have
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enough
money to
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buy
it.
Therefore
,
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children
might fall behind studies.
Secondly
,
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school
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can be uncomfortable
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because
most of them are not designed to fit to various weather conditions. The best example, is
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Alexandru-Ioan
high-school from Romania, which requires their
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students
to wear a skirt and a white shirt.
Consequently
,
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children
freeze during the winter.

To draw a conclusion, it seems to me that reputation and distinction among
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schools
are the main advantages of dressing up a
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uniform
, While
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students
face
also
drawbacks, suck as, a lack of affordability and comfort.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Schools in some countries require their students to wear a uniform. What are the positives and negatives of this rule? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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