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Safety standards are important when building people's homes. Who should be responsible for enforcing strict building codes – the government or the people who build the homes? Use your own knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. v.1

Safety standards are important when building people's homes. Who should be responsible for enforcing strict building codes – the government or the people who build the homes? Use your own knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. v. 1
The homes are the most indispensable aspect of any human being. They provide essentially the shelter and an area where the human can stay safely. Many people have the opinion that building owners are responsible for the safety standards of a building. In this essay, the reasons why both builders and government are equally responsible for the safety of the building are discussed. The builder is completely responsible for the architecture of a building. The architecture of the building should be selected in such a way that it includes safety standards. For instance, when the blueprint of a building is created, the necessary exit-path in case of fire should be reserved. The architectural design of a building is decided by the builder. Therefore, the builder must be more inclined to bring safety features in the building. Once the building is ready and occupied by people, the government must make necessary arrangements for the safety. Since the government is authorized to develop safety features in and around the building, the government is also responsible for the safety of a building. For example, a fire brigade unit can be established by the government near a major residential area so fire extinguisher unit can reach on time. Several safety features are developed by the government to provide the safety. In conclusion, in my opinion, both the government and the builder are equally responsible for the safety standard of a building. If a builder performs his tasks correctly by providing all safety features then the building will be a safer place to stay. The government also has a role by establishing necessary features around the building to ensure the safety of individuals. In this essay, the builders are responsible for architecture design and the government is authorized to establish outsider features are discussed.
The homes are the most indispensable aspect of any human being. They provide
essentially
the shelter and an area where the human can stay
safely
.
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people
have the opinion that
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building
owners are
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responsible
for the
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safety
standards of a
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building
. In this essay, the reasons why both
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builders
and
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government
are
equally
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responsible
for the
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safety
of the
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building
are discussed
.

The
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builder
is completely
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responsible
for the architecture of a
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building
. The architecture of the
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building
should
be selected
in such a way that it includes
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safety
standards.
For instance
, when the blueprint of a
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building
is created
, the necessary exit-path in case of fire should
be reserved
. The architectural design of a
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building
is decided
by the
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builder
.
Therefore
, the
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builder
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must
be more inclined to bring
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safety
features in the building.

Once the
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building
is ready and occupied by
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people
, the
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government
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must
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make
necessary arrangements for the
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safety
. Since the
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government
is authorized
to develop
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safety
features in and around the
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building
, the
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government
is
also
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responsible
for the
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safety
of a
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building
.
For example
, a fire brigade unit can
be established
by the
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government
near a major residential area
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so
fire extinguisher unit can reach on time. Several
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safety
features
are developed
by the
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government
to provide the safety.

In conclusion
, in my opinion, both the
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government
and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
builder
are
equally
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responsible
for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
safety
standard of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
. If a
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builder
performs his tasks
correctly
by providing all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
safety
features then the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
will be a safer place to stay. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
also
has a role by establishing necessary features around the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
to ensure the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
safety
of individuals. In this essay, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
builders
are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
responsible
for architecture design and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
is authorized
to establish outsider features
are discussed
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
46Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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Geoffrey Willans

IELTS essay Safety standards are important when building people's homes. Who should be responsible for enforcing strict building codes – the government or the people who build the homes? Use your own knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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