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Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Comments about the task: 1. An opinion essay 2. You must say how much you agree or disagree Totally agree 1. Corruption 2. Bad economic policies Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.13

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. Comments about the task: 1. An opinion essay 2. You must say how much you agree or disagree Totally agree 1. Corruption 2. Bad economic policies v. 13
Poverty is one of the very crucial problem faced by many of the countries. Several measures have been taken to help such nations to tackle these problems such as wealthier countries had contributed money to poorer nations. But many believe that this is not used effectively to reduce poverty, hence instead of financial aid, other types of help need to be offered. This essay will discuss the reasons as why the poor countries are not benefited with such help and what other measures can rich countries take towards them. The main reason behind poverty in many countries is lack of education. Children are not provided with good education which restricts them from getting a well paid job resulting in poverty. Although rich countries provide money to such nations, bad administration and corruption are the reason why these moneys are not reached till the needful person. Since these countries lack literate individuals, the present government makes bad economic decisions and this effect the poverty issue to a great extent. No matter how much money is provided, if the use is not done appropriately there is no outcome of such gestures. Apart from giving money, the wealthier countries can provide nonfinancial help. For instance, these countries can provide free medicines to poorer nations to help them, or send nurses and doctors to provide medical help. The second initiative that can be taken is to arrange educational camps and provide free education or establish scholarship programs so that parents are encouraged to educate their children. Such initiatives can help the citizens of poor countries to overcome their problems and be self sufficient to live their individual life. In conclusion, money is not the only thing that can help, there are various other methods as well for helping the underprivileged countries.
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nations
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need to
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. This essay will discuss the reasons as why the poor
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countries
are not benefited with such
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help
and what other measures can rich
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countries
take towards them.

The main reason behind
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poverty
in
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many
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countries
is lack of education. Children are not provided with
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education which restricts them from getting a well paid job resulting in
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poverty
. Although rich
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countries
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provide
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to such
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,
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administration and corruption are the reason why these
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moneys
are not reached till the needful person. Since these
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countries
lack literate individuals, the present
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government
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makes
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economic decisions and this effect the
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poverty
issue to a great extent. No matter how much
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money
is provided
, if the
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use
is not done
appropriately
there is no outcome of such gestures.

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, the wealthier
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countries
can
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nonfinancial
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countries
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free medicines to poorer
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nations
to
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help
them, or
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send
nurses and doctors to
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medical
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help
. The second initiative that can
be taken
is to arrange educational camps and
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provide
free education or establish scholarship programs
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so
that parents
are encouraged
to educate their children. Such initiatives can
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help
the citizens of poor
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countries
to overcome their problems and be
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self sufficient
to
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live
their individual life.

In conclusion
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is not the
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only
thing that can
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help
, there are various other methods
as well
for helping the underprivileged
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countries
.
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IELTS essay Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. Comments about the task: 1. An opinion essay 2. You must say how much you agree or disagree Totally agree 1. Corruption 2. Bad economic policies v. 13

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4 paragraphs
297 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
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