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Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Comments about the task: 1. An opinion essay 2. You must say how much you agree or disagree Totally agree 1. Corruption 2. Bad economic policies Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.1

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. Comments about the task: 1. An opinion essay 2. You must say how much you agree or disagree Totally agree 1. Corruption 2. Bad economic policies v. 1
Wealthy countries regularly render financial aid to third world countries, yet, they remain impoverished. This is because of their government's corrupt practices and unhealthy economic policies. Hence, I totally agree that other forms of help such as free drugs and foreign scholarships be given to these countries. Corruption limits progress. Leaders of most poor countries defraud their people. Unfortunately, when money is given to these nations, it passes through these fraudulent governments. They divert the fund to selfish projects such as acquiring new houses and cars, neglecting the main purpose of it. A good example is Nigerian politicians. In 2009, The Sun newspaper reported on 11th March, that the UK government gave ours a million pound for healthcare. However, till date, no health facility admits to have gotten anything from the state. Instead, it was said in Thisday newspaper on 29th of same month that each governor got an additional official car. Therefore, I think direct healthcare such as funding of very crucial drugs such as HIV drugs will be better as it makes it difficult for leaders to indulge in their crimes. Furthermore, these third world countries have irrational economic policies. Little attention is paid to things such as education which promotes development in a society. Very little of the nation's budget is allocated to it in most of these countries. For instance, in Nigerian 2018 budget, only 7% was set aside for academics. Thus irrespective of the amount of fund given to them, their unfounded priority keeps them impoverished. Consequently so, supports such as scholarships to study abroad creates room for better education. These individuals can then return to develop their place. In conclusion, financial support has not helped less privileged nations due to their criminal practices and unreasonable economic strategies. Accordingly, other types of assistance in the form of scholarships and drug sponsorship should be considered.
Wealthy
countries
regularly
render financial aid to third world
countries
,
yet
, they remain impoverished. This is
because
of their
government
's corrupt practices and unhealthy economic policies.
Hence
, I
totally
agree
that other forms of
help
such as free
drugs
and foreign scholarships be
given
to these countries.

Corruption limits progress. Leaders of most poor
countries
defraud their
people
. Unfortunately, when money is
given
to these nations, it passes through these fraudulent
governments
. They divert the fund to selfish projects such as acquiring new
houses
and cars, neglecting the main purpose of it. A
good
example is Nigerian politicians. In 2009, The Sun newspaper reported on 11th March, that the UK
government
gave ours a million pound for healthcare.
However
, till date, no health facility
admits to have
gotten anything from the state.
Instead
, it
was said
in
Thisday
newspaper on 29th of same month that each governor
got
an additional official car.
Therefore
, I
think
direct healthcare such as funding of
very
crucial
drugs
such as HIV
drugs
will be better as it
makes
it difficult for leaders to indulge in their crimes.

Furthermore
, these third world
countries
have irrational economic policies.
Little
attention
is paid
to things such as education which promotes development in a society.
Very
little
of the nation's budget
is allocated
to it in most of these
countries
.
For instance
, in Nigerian 2018 budget,
only
7%
was set
aside for academics.
Thus
irrespective of the amount of fund
given
to them, their unfounded priority
keeps
them impoverished.
Consequently
so
, supports such as scholarships to study abroad creates room for better education. These individuals can then return to develop their place.

In conclusion
, financial support has not
helped
less privileged nations due to their criminal practices and unreasonable economic strategies.
Accordingly
, other types of assistance in the form of scholarships and
drug
sponsorship should
be considered
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. Comments about the task: 1. An opinion essay 2. You must say how much you agree or disagree Totally agree 1. Corruption 2. Bad economic policies v. 1

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