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Many species of animals and plants are in danger of becoming extinct. What are the causes of this problem, and what can be done to prevent it from happening? v.1

Many species of animals and plants are in danger of becoming extinct. What are the causes of this problem, and what can be done to prevent it from happening? v. 1
It is true that human activities during recent decades have led to extinction of tremendous wildlife species such as plants and animals. While there are various possible reasons that have led to accelerate this trend, there are several solutions that can be taken steps to tackle this problem. In order to find out effective solutions to this problem, it is necessary to understand some of human activities which have led to this issue. Firstly, the most important factor is deforestation. If forests are destructed due to several purposes, animals and plants will lose their habitats. Therefore, animals cannot survive and adapt themselves with new situation and plants cannot grow anywhere else. Secondly, human activities have resulted in air pollution. Consequently, air pollution has led to several problems such as global warming that influences animals and plants habitats adversely. For example, global warming has resulted in the melting of the glaciers which are the main habitat of polar bears. In addition, emission of harmful fumes due to industrial activities that has resulted in the extinction of several plants. However, there are several solutions which can be addressed to reduce the pace of this trend. To begin, governments should impose high fines on the companies that destructing forests to prepare wood for commercial purposes. In addition, there should be severe surveillance on illegal deforestation activities to prevent destroying wildlife species. Furthermore, governments have to cooperate with other international associations to control negative factors which increase pace of global warming phenomenon. For example, there should be high taxes to the industrial factories which are polluting air through emission of harmful fumes such as CO2. In conclusion, although human activities have resulted in extinction of tremendous animals and plants, there are still some opportunities in which human beings can reverse the negative impacts that have led to this matter.
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activities
during recent decades have
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led
to extinction of tremendous wildlife species such as
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plants
and
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animals
. While there are various possible reasons that have
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to accelerate this trend, there are several solutions that can
be taken
steps to tackle this problem.

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some
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led
to this issue.
Firstly
, the most
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important
factor is deforestation. If forests
are destructed
due to several purposes,
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animals
and
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plants
will lose their habitats.
Therefore
,
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animals
cannot survive and adapt themselves with new situation and
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plants
cannot grow anywhere else.
Secondly
,
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human
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activities
have
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resulted
in air pollution.
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, air pollution has
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led
to several problems such as global warming that influences
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animals
and
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plants
habitats
adversely
.
For example
, global warming has
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resulted
in the melting of the glaciers which are the main habitat of polar bears.
In addition
, emission of harmful fumes due to industrial
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activities
that has
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resulted
in the extinction of several plants.

However
, there are several solutions which can
be addressed
to
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reduce
the pace of this trend. To
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begin
,
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governments
should impose high fines on the
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companies
that destructing forests to prepare wood for commercial purposes.
In addition
, there should be severe surveillance on illegal deforestation
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activities
to
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prevent
destroying wildlife species.
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,
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governments
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have to
cooperate with other international associations to control
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negative
factors which increase pace of global warming phenomenon.
For example
, there should be high taxes to the industrial factories which are polluting air through emission of harmful fumes such as CO2.

In conclusion
, although
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human
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activities
have
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resulted
in extinction of tremendous
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animals
and
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plants
, there are
still
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some
opportunities in which
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human
beings can reverse the
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negative
impacts that have
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led
to this matter.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Many species of animals and plants are in danger of becoming extinct. What are the causes of this problem, and what can be done to prevent it from happening? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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