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Research shows that business meetings and training are happening online nowadays. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v.2

Research shows that business meetings and training are happening online nowadays. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v. 2
Business conferences and training are taking place more and more on online platforms, replacing the traditional face-to-face communication and information exchange. This has both benefits and drawbacks in equal measure The trend seen in companies switching their training activities and business discussions to the online mode has many advantages. First of all, this offers staff increased flexibility and full control of their timetable, which is likely to diminish the unnecessary high stress levels and thus boost their work productivity. For instance, working mothers find this incredibly helpful for them to multitask between rearing their children and joining meetings to keep abreast of developments in the company. Furthermore, this online mode of operation could help companies economize on expenditure by not having to pay for electricity bill, printed documents or equipment for carrying out the meeting or training procedures, for instance. On the other hand, this option has two major drawbacks. Firstly, communication via the internet can be a hindrance as there might be failures in the flow of information. To illustrate, in [country’s name] not many people can afford high-speed internet connection, and as a consequence, lagging connection or computer crashing can cause disruptions, reducing the comprehension among meeting or training participants. In addition, there is little room for practice and the lack of direct guidance also prevents people from fully grasping the skills. It would be less productive because employees receiving training cannot apply what they are taught on the internet, or can be clumsy in their actual performance since there is no one to show them whether they are doing it the right way as reality is sometimes completely different from theory. In conclusion, while there are some advantages for staying at home and participating in discussions or training sessions, there are also disadvantages showing that both sides of this development should be carefully viewed.
Business conferences and
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are taking place more and more on online platforms, replacing the traditional face-to-face communication and information exchange. This has both benefits and drawbacks in equal
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companies
switching their
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training
activities and business discussions to the online mode has
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many
advantages.
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First of all
, this offers staff increased flexibility and full control of their timetable, which is likely to diminish the unnecessary high
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stress
levels and
thus
boost their work productivity.
For instance
, working mothers find this
incredibly
helpful for them to multitask between rearing their children and joining meetings to
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keep
abreast of developments in the
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company
.
Furthermore
, this online mode of operation could
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help
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companies
economize on expenditure by not having to pay for electricity bill, printed documents or equipment for carrying out the meeting or
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training
procedures,
for instance
.

On the other hand
, this option has two major drawbacks.
Firstly
, communication via the internet can be a hindrance as there might be failures in the flow of information. To illustrate, in [country’s name] not
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many
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people
can afford high-speed internet connection, and as a consequence, lagging connection or computer crashing can cause disruptions, reducing the comprehension among meeting or
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training
participants.
In addition
, there is
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little
room for practice and the lack of direct guidance
also
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from
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grasping the
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skills
. It would be less productive
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because
employees receiving
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training
cannot apply what they
are taught
on the internet, or can be clumsy in their actual performance since there is no one to
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show
them whether they are doing it the right way as reality is
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sometimes
completely
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different
from theory.

In conclusion
, while there are
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some
advantages for staying at home and participating in discussions or
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training
sessions, there are
also
disadvantages showing that both sides of this development should be
carefully
viewed.
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6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Research shows that business meetings and training are happening online nowadays. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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