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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective? v.12

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 12
Owing to the problems of high level of traffic and the increase of pollution, it is considered that increase in the price of petrol is the most effective way in solving these problems. I agree that increase in petrol price will help in fighting these problems. However there are other policies that can be implemented. Generally speaking, whenever a commodity is sold at a lower price, the demand tends to increase. However, the increase in price brings about a decrease in demand. This aptly summarizes the law of demand and supply. From this concept, increasing the price of petrol will not only lower its consumption by road users, particularly car owners and heavy duty vehicles leading to a reduction in traffic rate but also will hinder factories that buy and burn premium motor spirit as fuel. It would force a decrease in the number of automobiles bought whilst ensuring efficiency of the existing ones. But nations and regulation authorities can do more to curb carbon emission. They can do so by providing carbon emission quotas to industries and vehicle companies. Through a quota system, they can regulate the emission level per city and ensuring a green environment. This cap helps the authorities to generate revenue, improve the ambient air quality and lives of her citizenry. Nonetheless, measures like heavy taxing of factories, traffic regulations such as driving only on specific days of the week will also contribute to the eradication of the aforementioned problem. Auto companies can also invest heavily in research and development. This would help in the invention of carbon efficient engines and eventually help to ameliorate the emission of greenhouse gases. In conclusion, in as much as increasing the price of fuel will help in solving the growth of traffic and pollution in different cities, there will be an economic effect to this. Implementing other measures together with the price increase will do a great deal in mitigating the problems.
Owing to the
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problems
of high level of
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traffic
and the
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increase
of pollution, it
is considered
that
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increase
in the
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price
of petrol is the most effective way in solving these
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problems
. I
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agree
that
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increase
in petrol
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price
will
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help
in fighting these
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problems
.
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However
there are other policies that can
be implemented
.

Generally
speaking, whenever a commodity
is sold
at a lower
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price
, the demand tends to
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increase
.
However
, the
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increase
in
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price
brings about a decrease in demand. This
aptly
summarizes the law of demand and supply. From this concept, increasing the
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price
of petrol will not
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only
lower its consumption by road users,
particularly
car owners and
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heavy duty
vehicles leading to a reduction in
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traffic
rate
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but
also
will hinder factories that
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buy
and burn premium motor spirit as fuel. It would force a decrease in the number of automobiles
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bought
whilst ensuring efficiency of the existing ones.

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But
nations and regulation authorities can do more to curb carbon
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emission
. They can do
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so
by providing carbon
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emission
quotas to industries and vehicle
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companies
. Through a quota system, they can regulate the
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emission
level per city and ensuring a green environment. This cap
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helps
the authorities to generate revenue,
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improve
the ambient air quality and
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lives
of her citizenry.

Nonetheless, measures like heavy taxing of factories,
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traffic
regulations such as driving
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only
on specific days of the week will
also
contribute to the eradication of the aforementioned
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problem
. Auto
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companies
can
also
invest
heavily
in research and development. This would
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help
in the invention of carbon efficient engines and
eventually
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help
to ameliorate the
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emission
of greenhouse gases.

In conclusion
, in as much as increasing the
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price
of fuel will
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help
in solving the growth of
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traffic
and pollution in
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different
cities, there will be an economic effect to this. Implementing other measures together with the
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price
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increase
will do a great deal in mitigating the
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problems
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 12

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
323 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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