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Recently, it is common for people not to know their neighbours. What is the causes of this problem? What can be done to solve this problem? v.1

Recently, it is common for people not to know their neighbours. What is the causes of this problem? What can be done to solve this problem? v. 1
It has been noted that nowadays, many people usually do not take note of their neighbours. Although there are so many reasons for this, solutions are also available. One major reason why people tend not to know their neighbours is the usual daily struggling to make ends meet. In other words, humans are becoming much engaged with their work/business, and most individuals do not work from home or nearby, thereby having little time to spend at home especially in the late hours. Furthermore, individuals now use their leave periods to travel out of their countries and spend quality times with their families. For example, it has been found that many Nigerians are currently leaving their homes to other countries with their families for summer holidays. Lastly, in some countries where there are many tribes and religions such as, Nigeria, individuals often avoid associations with others to avoid troubles and misunderstandings. Having stated the major causes, the best solutions to them would certainly start from the governments. Firstly, in nations with many tribal and religious differences, the governments should provide for all their citizens irrespective of what group they belong. This goes a long way in expressing the unity of the nation to them, thus, promoting unity within all neighbourhood. That said, law should also be made on the working hours of all companies/organisations to suit all workers, and by so doing create adequate space for good family interaction and other activities such as, visiting friends. Finally, residents should make it a point of duty to fix dates for yards and community meetings atleast once monthly whereby they talk about some worrying issues, and by so doing create avenue for knowing one another. In conclusion, it is unbecoming of nearby residents not to know themselves due to certain reasons, hence, all members of the society and the rulers have vital roles to play in providing solutions.
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been noted
that nowadays,
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many
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people
usually
do not take note of their
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neighbours
. Although there are
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so
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many
reasons for this, solutions are
also
available.

One major reason why
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people
tend not to know their
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neighbours
is the usual daily struggling to
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make
ends
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meet
. In
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other
words, humans are becoming much engaged with their work/business, and most individuals do not work from home or nearby, thereby having
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little
time to spend at home
especially
in the late hours.
Furthermore
, individuals
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now
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use
their
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leave
periods to travel out of their countries and spend quality times with their families.
For example
, it has
been found
that
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many
Nigerians are
currently
leaving their homes to
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other
countries with their families for summer holidays.
Lastly
, in
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some
countries where there are
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many
tribes and religions such as, Nigeria, individuals
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often
avoid associations with others to avoid troubles and misunderstandings.

Having stated the major causes, the best solutions to them would
certainly
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start
from the
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governments
.
Firstly
, in nations with
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many
tribal and religious differences, the
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governments
should provide for all their citizens irrespective of what group they belong. This goes a long way in expressing the unity of the nation to them,
thus
, promoting unity within all
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neighbourhood
. That said, law should
also
be made
on the working hours of all
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companies
/
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organisations
to suit all workers, and by
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so
doing create adequate space for
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good
family interaction and
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other
activities such as, visiting friends.
Finally
, residents should
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make
it a point of duty to
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fix
dates for yards and community meetings
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atleast
once monthly whereby they talk about
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some
worrying issues, and by
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so
doing create avenue for knowing one another.

In conclusion
, it is unbecoming of nearby residents not to know themselves due to certain reasons,
hence
, all members of the society and the rulers have vital roles to play in providing solutions.
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3Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Recently, it is common for people not to know their neighbours. What is the causes of this problem? What can be done to solve this problem? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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