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Recent surveys show increased interest in relocation and travel to other countries. What may be the reasons for this trend, and what will be the possible outcome from this behaviour? v.4

Recent surveys show increased interest in relocation and travel to other countries. What may be the reasons for this trend, and what will be the possible outcome from this behaviour? v. 4
Immigration and travelling can undoubtedly have a significant impact on a society. Recent surveys have indicated a rise in the interest in relocation and travel to other countries. This essay will provide a detailed account of the reasons as well as the possible outcome of this trend. To start with, relocation provides people with better job opportunities. As a matter of fact, big cities are more popular, which means that their local recession tends to be very strong. As a result, employees in the city stand a very good chance of higher salaries, which will enable them to afford for the essential things in their daily routine. In reality, a recent research reveals that 66% of US workers would move abroad for a substantially higher salary. Secondly, people moved to other countries in order to obtain a higher quality of life for themselves or for their family. This higher living standard ranges from facilities such as schools, hospitals, entertainment locations like shopping malls, parks to essential needs for example food, clothes, etc. Last but not least, it is not surprising that many individuals consider travelling as their hobby since it provides them with many gold chances. Once travelling, one can relax while exploring a new culture, trying unique cuisine as well as improve themselves, become more confident on the grounds that they have no choice but to adapt new things along with overcoming various obstacles. In reality, it has been proved that 55% of people sightseeing to go off the beaten path, at the same time, 34% of millennials travel to experience more from life. There is some specific outcome of the tendency above. First of all, it is undeniable that relocation and travel boost the country’s economy. Either people who move to another country for work or excursion contribute to the economy since they must use that country’s service. For instance, Vietnam receives 442. 220 billion from the visitors in 2019. Not only does the trend affect the recession, but it also diversifies the country’s culture as well. Immigrants come to another country to settle, but they also bring in their culture during the time. To illustrate, in the US, there is still Asia market or Vietnamese market along with others and the locals can also come and purchase for goods. Nevertheless, everything has its two sides. The increase in relocation and travel can lead to the government paying more attention to the immigrants so as to assure their safety as well as their citizens. Besides, the government must also take notice of their city, services, landscapes, etc. with a view to attract more travellers. To summarize, with the aforementioned points, in my opinion, better job opportunities, higher living standard and gold chances provided by travelling are three main reasons for the increased interest in relocation and travel. In addition, the outcome of the trend above are economy boost, culture diversification and government cares.
Immigration and
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travelling
can
undoubtedly
have a significant impact on a society. Recent surveys have indicated a rise in the interest in relocation and
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travel
to other
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countries
. This essay will provide a detailed account of the reasons as
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well
as the possible outcome of this trend.

To
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start
with, relocation provides
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people
with better job opportunities. As a matter of fact,
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big
cities are more popular, which means that their local recession tends to be
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very
strong.
As a result
, employees in the city stand a
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very
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good
chance of higher salaries, which will enable them to afford for the essential things in their daily routine. In reality, a recent research reveals that 66% of US workers would
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move
abroad for a
substantially
higher salary.
Secondly
,
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people
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moved
to other
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countries
in order to obtain a higher quality of life for themselves or for their family. This higher living standard ranges from facilities such as schools, hospitals, entertainment locations like shopping malls, parks to essential needs
for example
food, clothes, etc. Last
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but
not least, it is not surprising that
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many
individuals consider
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travelling
as their hobby since it provides them with
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many
gold chances. Once
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travelling
, one can relax while exploring a new
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culture
, trying unique cuisine as
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well
as
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improve
themselves, become more confident on the grounds that they have no choice
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but
to adapt new things along with overcoming various obstacles. In reality, it has
been proved
that 55% of
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people
sightseeing to go off the beaten path, at the same time, 34% of millennials
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travel
to experience more from life.

There is
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some
specific outcome of the tendency above.
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First of all
, it is undeniable that relocation and
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travel
boost the
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country’s
economy. Either
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people
who
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move
to another
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country
for work or excursion contribute to the economy since they
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must
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use
that
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country’s
service.
For instance
, Vietnam receives 442. 220 billion from the visitors in 2019. Not
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only
does the trend affect the recession,
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but
it
also
diversifies the
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country’s
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culture
as
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well
. Immigrants
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come
to another
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country
to settle,
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but
they
also
bring in their
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culture
during the time. To illustrate, in the US, there is
still
Asia market or Vietnamese market along with others and the locals can
also
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come
and
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purchase
for
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goods
.
Nevertheless
, everything has its two sides. The increase in relocation and
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travel
can lead to the
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government
paying more attention to the immigrants
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so as to
assure their safety as
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well
as their citizens.
Besides
, the
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government
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must
also
take notice of their city, services, landscapes, etc. with a view to attract more
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travellers
.

To summarize
, with the aforementioned points, in my opinion, better job opportunities, higher living standard and gold chances provided by
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travelling
are three main reasons for the increased interest in relocation and
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travel
.
In addition
, the outcome of the trend above are economy boost,
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culture
diversification and
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government
cares.
20Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Recent surveys show increased interest in relocation and travel to other countries. What may be the reasons for this trend, and what will be the possible outcome from this behaviour? v. 4

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  American English
4 paragraphs
485 words
6.5
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