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Reading comics only rot the children's mind than to provide any good education. How far you agree/disagree with this? v.1

Reading comics only rot the children's mind than to provide any good education. How far you agree/disagree with this? v. 1
Reading plays a part and parcel role in everyone's life. It is a debatable issue that reading comics only use for fun rather than give any valuable information. However, I disagree with the given statement. I will discuss my perspective reading of the comic books in the upcoming paragraphs. The internet has become an enormous advanced area in educational zone, has clearly wiped out children’s interest in reading. On the other hand, lack of motivation is depriving children of experiencing unique mental activity that can only be offered by reading. Scientists have proven in the past that reading stimulates different parts of the brain and helps against cognitive decline. By any means of reading, I feel that it would be unfair to consider comics are regional child’s mind. They can serve as one of the initial steps in developing children’s interest in literature. Furthermore, kids lacking their laugh are”INCOMPLETE”. It's truly all about smile, giggle and laugh that complete their world. Reading comics, do provide them a good indoor way to connect them to their innocent things. ”LAUGHING ”is an excellent way to reduce stress in our lives, and it helps to cope up with a stressful lifestyle and tight routine hours of work ranging from offices to schools. I would not agree about reading comics, as a regional source of children’s mind. If we analyse keen around, while keeping an awareness of the sensitivity of children and minds, we will conclude for sure that it's their”LAUGH” and”RELAXATION”that would not let their minds to be rotten. And a deprivation of any one of them can rot their minds and impure their world.
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Reading
plays a part and parcel role in everyone's life. It is a debatable issue that
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reading
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comics
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only
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use
for fun
rather
than give any valuable information.
However
, I disagree with the
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given
statement. I will discuss my perspective
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reading
of the
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comic
books in the upcoming paragraphs.

The internet has become an enormous advanced area in educational zone, has
clearly
wiped out
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children’s
interest in
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reading
.
On the other hand
, lack of motivation is depriving
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children
of experiencing unique mental activity that can
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only
be offered
by
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reading
. Scientists have proven in the past that
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reading
stimulates
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different
parts of the brain and
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helps
against cognitive decline. By any means of
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reading
, I feel that it would be unfair to consider
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comics
are regional child’s
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mind
. They can serve as one of the initial steps in developing
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children’s
interest in literature.

Furthermore
, kids lacking their laugh are
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”INCOMPLETE
”. It's
truly
all about smile, giggle and laugh that complete their world.
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Reading
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comics
, do provide them a
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good
indoor way to connect them to their innocent things.
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”LAUGHING
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”is
an excellent way to
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reduce
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stress
in our
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lives
, and it
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helps
to cope up with a stressful lifestyle and tight routine hours of work ranging from offices to schools.

I would not
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agree
about
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reading
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comics
, as a regional source of
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children’s
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mind
. If we
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analyse
keen around, while keeping an awareness of the sensitivity of
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children
and
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minds
, we will conclude for sure that it's their
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”LAUGH
” and
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”RELAXATION
”that would not
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let
their
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minds
to be rotten. And a deprivation of any one of them can rot their
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minds
and impure their world.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Reading comics only rot the children's mind than to provide any good education. How far you agree/disagree with this? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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