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Read and think about the following statement: The college years are the best time in a person's life. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons to support your opinion. v.2

Read and think about the following statement: The college years are the best time in a person's life. Give reasons to support your opinion. v. 2
For many of us years which we spent at college are seen as the best period in our lives. At the same time, I surmise that our attitude to this time is bias because we tend to keep positive memory and forget about negative events. Consequently, to give a comprehensive answer on the issue we ought to look at the college years from both sides. To begin with, studying at college for majority of students is connected with independence. In fact, in the USA as well as in other countries it is a widespread practice to enroll at colleges which are located in neighboring states or even countries. As a result, studying may give young adults the sweet taste of freedom the first time in their lives. Unfortunately, this experience may be darkened by lack of money and necessity to earn them. Although, this issue may be perceived as insignificant, in reality students often face a problem to pay for housing and even food. Secondly, the period is characterized by acquiring new experience as well. For instance, during my education at college I got my first job and concequently I made my first money as well; I bought a car and participated to sport activities which used to be forbitten for me. However, new experience may be negative as well and many of students try drugs, alcohol, tabaco at college. Moreover, without parents' attention they may break the law which could have a disastrous consequences on the person' s future. Finally, the college education is associated with acquiring a profession which should guarantee student' s prosperity after the graduation. Although periodically the students' expectations match with reality, occasionally graduate students may struggle to find a decent job. In this case, they have to admit that they wasted their time and money. So, may we say that the college years are unquestionably the best time in a person' s life? Perhaps, there is no simple answer owing to the fact that the period is a mixture of positive and sometimes terrifying experience, nevertheless, I profoundly believe that it is one of the most crucial periods in live of each person and I actually love it.
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seen
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. At the same
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time
, I surmise that our attitude to this
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time
is bias
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because
we tend to
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keep
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positive
memory and forget about
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negative
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events
.
Consequently
, to give a comprehensive answer on the issue we ought to look at the college years from both sides.

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begin
with, studying at college for
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majority of
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students
is connected
with independence. In fact, in the USA as
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well
as in other countries it is a widespread practice to enroll at colleges which
are located
in neighboring states or even countries.
As a result
, studying may give young adults the sweet taste of freedom the
first
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time
in their
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lives
. Unfortunately, this
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experience
may
be darkened
by lack of money and necessity to earn them. Although, this issue may
be perceived
as insignificant, in reality
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students
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often
face a problem to pay for housing and even food.

Secondly
, the
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period
is characterized
by acquiring new
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experience
as
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well
.
For instance
, during my education at college I
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got
my
first
job and
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concequently
I made my
first
money as
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well
; I
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bought
a car and participated to sport activities which
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used
to be
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forbitten
for me.
However
, new
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experience
may be
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negative
as
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well
and
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of
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students
try drugs, alcohol,
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at college.
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, without
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on the
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, the college education
is associated
with acquiring a profession which should guarantee
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periodically
the
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occasionally
graduate
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students
may struggle to find a decent job.
In this case
, they
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have to
admit that they wasted their
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time
and money.

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So
, may we say that the college years are
unquestionably
the best
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time
in a
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person&
#039; s life? Perhaps, there is no simple answer owing to the fact that the
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period
is a mixture of
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positive
and
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sometimes
terrifying
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experience
,
nevertheless
, I
profoundly
believe that it is one of the most crucial
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periods
in
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live
of each person and I actually
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love
it.
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23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes
Learn everything you can, anytime you can, from anyone you can; there will always come a time when you will be grateful you did.
Sarah Caldwell

IELTS essay Read and think about the following statement: The college years are the best time in a person's life. Give reasons to support your opinion. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
364 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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