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Read and think about the following statement: pets should be treated like family members. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons to support your opinion. v.2

Read and think about the following statement: pets should be treated like family members. Give reasons to support your opinion. v. 2
Although there is no simple answer on this question and I can see the foundations on which those distinct opinions about the issue are based, I profoundly believe that pets ought to be treated like a part of a family because of the reasons which are discussed in details below. To begin with, there is no doubt that animals and human beings are not equal in many ways, for instance, a punishment for killing or murdering a person and an animal are incomparable. What is more, it is widely believed that animals have no consciousness and therefore they have no right or free will. In other words, there is no equality between an owner and his or her pet. However, may we aver that pets should not be treated like family members? The answer on this question is " no" , perhaps, because of subjective reasons. In fact, I surmise that each individual who has even owned a pet will agree with the statement that a pet has inevitably become a friend and a part of familiy. I can speak from my own expereince. In my childhood when I lived on a farm, we had many domisticated animals and I was allowed to have my own dog. This happy animal which was initially treated without respect from other members of family has gain it when it protected me from other dogs which attacked me. Although the dog was badly hurt, it managed to fulfill its duty. Today this dog is dead but it still has its place in my heart. Besides, we should treat pets as a part of our families owing to the fact that this attitude has a positive effect on human' s health. In fact, creation of such deep relationships between a cat, a dog or any other pet may dramatically improve health condition of the owner, in particular when we have a deal with senior citizens and elderly who feel abandoned. In conclusion, although at the first glance it seems unreanable to treat animals as a member of a family, more attentive look at the issue reveals that we ought to treat our pets as family members because of many subjective and objective reasons.
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the foundations on which those distinct opinions about the issue
are based
, I
profoundly
believe that
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pets
ought to
be treated
like a part of a
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family
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because
of the reasons which
are discussed
in
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details
below.

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begin
with, there is no doubt that
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animals
and human beings are not equal in
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many
ways,
for instance
, a punishment for killing or murdering a person and an
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animal
are incomparable.
What is more
, it is
widely
believed that
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animals
have no consciousness and
therefore
they have no right or free will. In
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other
words, there is no equality between an owner and
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his or her
pet.
However
, may we aver that
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pets
should not
be treated
like
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family
members?

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,
perhaps,
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because
of subjective reasons. In fact, I surmise that each individual who has even
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owned
a pet will
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agree
with the statement that a pet has
inevitably
become a friend and a part of
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familiy
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own
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expereince
. In my childhood when I
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lived
on a farm, we had
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many
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domisticated
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animals and
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allowed
to have my
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own
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dog
. This happy
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animal
which was
initially
treated without respect from
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other
members of
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family
has
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it when it protected me from
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other
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dogs
which attacked me. Although the
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dog
was
badly
hurt, it managed to fulfill its duty.

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Today
this
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dog
is dead
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but
it
still
has its place in my heart.
Besides
, we should treat
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pets
as a part of our
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families
owing to the fact that this attitude has a
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positive
effect on
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human&
#039; s health. In fact, creation of such deep relationships between a cat, a
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dog
or any
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other
pet may
dramatically
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improve
health condition of the owner,
in particular
when we have a deal with senior citizens and elderly who feel abandoned.

In conclusion
, although at the
first
glance it seems
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unreanable
to treat
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animals
as a member of a
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family
, more attentive look at the issue reveals that we ought to treat our
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pets
as
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family
members
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because
of
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many
subjective and objective reasons.
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25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Read and think about the following statement: pets should be treated like family members. Give reasons to support your opinion. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
368 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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