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Question: The best way to improve health is to do regular exercise. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Question: The best way to improve health is to do regular exercise. v. 1
The most effective method in developing and improving health is to do daily exercise. While I agree that doing regular exercise is the key to enhance health, I believe that a healthy diet is also important. On the one hand, doing daily exercise is an easy way to enhance individual's health. Firstly, in terms of physical health, people can build and maintain strong muscle and bone. In fact, during exercise daily, these exercises make burn calories and release hormone which promotes the ability of the muscle grow and build bone density. Therefore, it reduces the risk of health problems such as stroke, heart disease, obesity, etc. Secondly, in terms of mental health, engaging in regular exercise really a wonder for relaxing and sleeping better. This is because, the energy depletion, which occurs during exercise; therefore, it stimulates a deeper sleep and have a mood better. On the other hand, I firmly agree that a balanced diet plays a critical in stepping toward a happy and healthy life. Firstly, having a healthy diet provides people with sufficient amount of nutrients, which can improve health for the long-term. In fact, the prevalence of fast food and processed food is at a higher risk of heart diseases; therefore, people could make healthier food choices which include: vitamins, mineral, health fat. It ensured for immune system and prevent transmission of virus and bacteria. Moreover, it is a principal weapon against some diseases: diabetes, heart disease, high blood pressure. Secondly, eating well is able to create the feeling of well being. In fact, according to some statistics, up to around 70% of people have a healthy diet which lead to have a happy life and reduce depression or stress. In brief, I believe that doing daily exercise is a good method to boost health, but I strongly agree that a healthy diet is one of the best way enhance health
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is to do
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exercise
. While I
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agree
that doing regular
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is the key to enhance
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health
, I believe that a
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healthy
diet is
also
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important
.

On the one hand, doing
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daily
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exercise
is an easy way to enhance individual's
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health
.
Firstly
, in terms of physical
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health
,
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people
can build and maintain strong muscle and bone. In fact, during
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exercise
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daily
, these
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exercises
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make
burn calories and release hormone which promotes the ability of the muscle grow and build bone density.
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, it
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reduces
the
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of
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health
problems such as stroke, heart
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disease
, obesity, etc.
Secondly
, in terms of mental
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health
, engaging in regular
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exercise
really
a wonder for relaxing and sleeping better. This is
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because
, the energy depletion, which occurs during
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exercise
;
therefore
, it stimulates a deeper sleep and have a mood better.

On the other hand
, I
firmly
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agree
that a balanced diet plays a critical in stepping toward a happy and
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healthy
life.
Firstly
, having a
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healthy
diet provides
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people
with sufficient amount of nutrients, which can
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improve
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health
for the long-term. In fact, the prevalence of
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fast
food and processed food is at a higher
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risk
of heart
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diseases
;
therefore
,
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people
could
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make
healthier food choices which include: vitamins, mineral,
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health
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fat
. It ensured for immune system and
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prevent
transmission of virus and bacteria.
Moreover
, it is a principal weapon against
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some
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diseases
: diabetes, heart
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disease
, high blood pressure.
Secondly
, eating well is able to create the feeling of
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well being
. In fact, according to
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some
statistics, up to around 70% of
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people
have a
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healthy
diet which lead to have a happy life and
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reduce
depression or
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stress
.

In brief
, I believe that doing
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daily
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exercise
is a
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good
method to boost
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health
,
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but
I
strongly
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agree
that a
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healthy
diet is one of the best way enhance
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health
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Question: The best way to improve health is to do regular exercise. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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