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Question: Everybody should be allowed admission to University study program regardless of their level of Academic activity. To what extent do you agree or disagree. Give reason for your answer including relevant example from your own knowledge or experience v.1

Question: Everybody should be allowed admission to University study program regardless of their level of Academic activity. Give reason for your answer including relevant example from your own knowledge or experience v. 1
Education plays an important role in the economic growth of a country. A country with high literacy rate believes to develop much faster than other countries. Some people believe that every student should be allowed admission to the University regardless of his/her level of academic activity. I strongly disagree with the statement. According to me, only the students those deserve to be in the University should get an admission. There is no denying the fact that every student has the right to get proper education, but they must show willingness to receive good education. The students with poor academic records should not be allowed admission to the University. If we allow all students to take admission, then many good students won't be able to join the University. There must be an entrance exam for each student if he wishes to take admission. All the candidates should be ranked according to their result in the entrance examination. A University can only have a fixed number of students in a particular year, so it is necessary to filter the candidates. Through the examination, there will be no discrimination among the students and best performer in the exam will get an admission. To sum up, although it is the right of every student to receive good education, not every student should be allowed admission in the University. A proper system is necessary so that the deserving candidate can take admission. Even there were unlimited seats in a University, Students should be ranked according to their performance so that those who deserve can get an admission to a University.
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Education
plays an
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important
role in the economic growth of a country. A country with high literacy rate believes to develop much faster than other countries.
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Some
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people
believe that every
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student
should be
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allowed
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admission
to the
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University
regardless of his/her level of academic activity. I
strongly
disagree with the statement.
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According to me
,
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only
the
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students
those deserve to be in the
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University
should
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get
an admission.

There is no denying the fact that every
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student
has the right to
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get
proper
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education
,
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but
they
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must
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show
willingness to receive
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good
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education
. The
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students
with poor academic records should not be
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allowed
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admission
to the
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University
. If we
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allow
all
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students
to take
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admission
, then
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many
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good
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students
won't be able to
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join
the
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University
. There
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must
be an entrance exam for each
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student
if he wishes to take admission.

All the candidates should
be ranked
according to their result in the entrance examination. A
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University
can
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only
have a
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fixed
number of
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students
in a particular year,
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so
it is necessary to filter the candidates. Through the examination, there will be no discrimination among the
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students
and best performer in the exam will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
an admission.

To sum up, although it is the right of every
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student
to receive
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good
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education
, not every
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student
should be
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allowed
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admission
in the
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University
. A proper system is necessary
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so
that the deserving candidate can take
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admission
. Even there
were unlimited
seats in a
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University
,
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Students
should
be ranked
according to their performance
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so
that those who deserve can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
an
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admission
to a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
University
.
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IELTS essay Question: Everybody should be allowed admission to University study program regardless of their level of Academic activity. Give reason for your answer including relevant example from your own knowledge or experience v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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