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More people today prefer to live alone in comparison to the past Do you think it is a positive or negative development Give your opinion and relevant examples to support your view v.2

More people today prefer to live alone in comparison to the past Do you think it is a positive or negative development Give your opinion and relevant examples to support your view v. 2
There is no doubt that nowadays more and more people want to lead an independent life compared to the past. Some people argue that such a trend has a detrimental effect on our lives, In my opinion, however, living alone has a generally beneficial influence as well. On the one hand, there are many positive aspects to people living away from their families. This provides the opportunity for these people to live life on their own terms and make any decisions by themselves. Besides, living alone not only makes them independent but also makes them self-reliant, which is a crucial life skill to their successful career. For instance, managing all the house chores such as cleaning, paying bills, cooking and so on will make them well experienced at learning and managing diverse activities and will boost their confidence. On the other hand, there is no denying the fact that people living away from their family may find themselves in circumstances that may adversely affect their life. These people are more likely to fall prey to bad influence and dangerous activities, such as gambling or alcohol consumption, which may jeopardize their career or lead them astray from moral values. However, this situation is less likely to take place with people still living with their families. Besides, emotional bonding and family relationships can be maintained better if everyone is living together under one roof. In conclusion, living alone has both pros and cons. In my opinion, the advantages are more significant than the disadvantages, making people more responsible and self-reliant. The disadvantages should be thought of as a certain cost that we have to pay due to the characteristics of the world that we live in.
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people
want to lead an independent
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life
compared to the past.
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people
argue that such a trend has a detrimental effect on our
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lives
, In my opinion,
however
,
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living
alone has a
generally
beneficial influence
as well
.

On the one hand, there are
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many
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positive
aspects to
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people
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living
away from their
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families
. This provides the opportunity for these
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people
to
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live
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life
on their
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own
terms and
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make
any decisions by themselves.
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,
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living
alone not
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only
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makes
them independent
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also
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makes
them self-reliant, which is a crucial
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life
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skill
to their successful career.
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, managing all the
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house
chores such as cleaning, paying bills, cooking and
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on will
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make
them well experienced at learning and managing diverse activities and will boost their confidence.

On the other hand
, there is no denying the fact that
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people
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living
away from their
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family
may find themselves in circumstances that may
adversely
affect their
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life
. These
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people
are more likely to fall prey to
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bad
influence and
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dangerous
activities, such as gambling or alcohol consumption, which may jeopardize their career or lead them astray from moral values.
However
, this situation is less likely to take place with
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people
still
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living
with their
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families
.
Besides
, emotional bonding and
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family
relationships can
be maintained
better if everyone is
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living
together under one roof.

In conclusion
,
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living
alone has both pros and cons. In my opinion, the advantages are more significant than the disadvantages, making
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people
more responsible and self-reliant. The disadvantages should be
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thought
of as a certain cost that we
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have to
pay due to the characteristics of the world that we
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live
in.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay More people today prefer to live alone in comparison to the past Do you think it is a positive or negative development Give your opinion and relevant examples to support your view v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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