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Question: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important to set realistic goals than ambitious goals. Use specific reasons and examples to support your response. v.10

Question: It is more important to set realistic goals than ambitious goals. Use specific reasons and examples to support your response. v. 10
The past 50 years have seen a considerable increase in a number of people consuming junk food. It can lead to various health problems. While some people believe that the only way to resolve the issue is to prohibit it, I totally disagree that this kind of solution is available First of all, it is an undeniable fact that fast food is affordable for each individual. For instance, in hectic city life, where people are working almost throughout the day, they tend to eat fast food in order to save their precious time and money instead of going for costly restaurants, where served healthy meals. Moreover, the younger generation of the country opts to consume foods such as fried chicken, hamburger and chips, which are incredibly high in fat and salt are responsible for such ailments as high blood pressure, obesity and heart disease rather than eating a vitaminazed and nutritious repast Further and even more importantly, some fast food restaurants advertise to children in order to attract them to shape their future eating habits. One particularly good example of this is the character Ronald McDonald the bright clothes and smile of the McDonalds clown are a beacon to children. From my perspective, banning anything leads to the illegal selling of the prohibited item. If fast food is banned it will cause people to buy them at higher costs as well as an illegal way. Instead the individuals have to take responsibility for what they are eating. By way of conclusion, I reckon that fast food should not be banned to avoid its consumption on a large scale. In my opinion, we should rather focus on the benefits of consuming healthy meals and promote the same on a large scale
The past 50 years have
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seen
a considerable increase in a number of
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people
consuming junk
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food
. It can lead to various health problems. While
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some
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people
believe that the
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only
way to resolve the issue is to prohibit it, I
totally
disagree that this kind of solution is
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available


This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, it is an undeniable fact that
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fast
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food
is affordable for each individual.
For instance
, in hectic city life, where
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people
are working almost throughout the day, they tend to eat
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fast
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
in order to save their precious time and money
instead
of going for costly restaurants, where served healthy meals.
Moreover
, the younger generation of the country opts to consume
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foods
such as fried chicken, hamburger and chips, which are
incredibly
high in
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fat
and salt are responsible for such ailments as high blood pressure, obesity and heart disease
rather
than eating a
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vitaminazed
and nutritious repast

Further
and even more
importantly
,
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some
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fast
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food
restaurants advertise to children in order to attract them to shape their future eating habits. One
particularly
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good
example of this is the character Ronald McDonald the bright clothes and smile of the
Did you mean the fast food chain "McDonald's" (always spelled with a possessive apostrophe)?
McDonalds
clown are a beacon to children. From my perspective, banning anything leads to the illegal selling of the prohibited item. If
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fast
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food
is banned
it will cause
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people
to
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buy
them at higher costs
as well
as an illegal way.
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Instead
the individuals
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have to
take responsibility for what they are eating.

By way of conclusion, I reckon that
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fast
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
should not
be banned
to avoid its consumption on a large scale. In my opinion, we should
rather
focus on the benefits of consuming healthy meals and promote the same on a large
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scale
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Question: It is more important to set realistic goals than ambitious goals. Use specific reasons and examples to support your response. v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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