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Question: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Leadership comes naturally: one cannot learn to be a leader. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.22

Question: Leadership comes naturally: one cannot learn to be a leader. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 22
In this complicated world that we live, we see some people with a fantastic power of leadership that can lead a group of people or maybe a society. leadership is an advanced quality in a person which comes from different background skills and abilities. Some people believe that leadership is an inheritance ability, while others disagree, and look at this skill like other expertise which can learn by education. In my opinion, leadership is a combination of complex skills that a person can earn by study and practice. Here are a few important reasons in following paragraphs. First of all, generally, any body born with a different abilities, which they should be treated well to sprout along the whole life. In the early ages of life, any of these skills can empower or may be weaken through different education approach. Leadership as a high level character has some root cause in psychology' s background of any person. For example, I learn a historical book about one of the Persian king that has borne in a ordinary family in a small village. He worked in small village for whole youth. After an accidentally meeting with a wise man poet, he started to study hard in different discipline, and participated in mentor-ship class of the peot. Poet found that this young man has some good instinct, and maybe with attempts he can improve to be good poet. Finally, the young man learnt many skills like communication, delegation, take risk, hearing, team-working, improvising, creativity, management and planning. You can imagine this unknown man with long time practice and attempt became on o the Persian king at his forties. He is a historic role model for many young people in our culture. Second, some of skills and qualities maybe present in a person from born-time, but these kind of character can not make a good leader by themselves. If this kind of people don' t improve their abilities, surely, they will be spoiled after a while. There are many kind of sample of persons who they born with a high intelligence in a very prosper and cultivating family. at the first glance, all people expect them to become a powerful leader, but noting happend because they did not received good mentor-ship. In history there are a lot of unsuccessful person which they borned in royal family that they had many intrinsic factor of leadership but they were not successful. In conclusion, Leadership is a quality which can be learned. It has some intrinsic and extrinsic root factors. Intrinsic factor like as mother-born intelligence and extrinsic factors like education and mentor-ship, are needed to improve a person leadership quality.
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with a fantastic power of
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that can lead a group of
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people
or maybe a society.
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leadership
is an advanced
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quality
in a
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different
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.
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people
believe that
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leadership
is an inheritance
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ability
, while others disagree, and look at this
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skill
like other expertise which can learn by education. In my opinion,
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leadership
is a combination of complex
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skills
that a
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person
can earn by study and practice. Here are a few
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important
reasons in following paragraphs.

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,
generally
,
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any body
born with a
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different
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abilities
, which they should
be treated
well to sprout along the whole life. In the early ages of life, any of these
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skills
can empower or may be
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through
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different
education approach.
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Leadership
as a high level character has
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some
root cause in
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person
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, I learn a historical book about one of the Persian king that has borne in
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a
ordinary family in a
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village. He worked in
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village for whole youth. After an
accidentally
meeting with a wise
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poet, he
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started
to study
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hard
in
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different
discipline, and participated in mentor-ship
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class
of the
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peot
. Poet found that this young
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man
has
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some
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good
instinct, and maybe with attempts he can
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improve
to be
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good
poet.
Finally
, the young
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learnt
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skills
like communication, delegation, take
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, hearing, team-working, improvising, creativity, management and planning. You can imagine this unknown
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man
with long time practice and attempt became on o the Persian king at his forties. He is a historic role model for
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many
young
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people
in our culture.

Second,
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maybe present in a
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from born-time,
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these kind
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leader by themselves. If this kind of
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people
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,
surely
, they will
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after a while. There are
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who they born with
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prosper and cultivating family.
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the
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people
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them to become a powerful leader,
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noting
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mentor-ship. In history there are
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unsuccessful
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which they
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intrinsic
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leadership
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but
they were not successful.

In conclusion
,
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is a
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quality
which can
be learned
. It has
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some
intrinsic and extrinsic root
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factors
. Intrinsic
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like as mother-born intelligence and extrinsic
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factors
like education and mentor-ship,
are needed
to
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improve
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person
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leadership
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quality
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51Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19Mistakes

IELTS essay Question: Leadership comes naturally: one cannot learn to be a leader. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 22

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
444 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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