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As most people spend a major part of their adult life st work, job satisfaction is an important element of Individual well being. What factors that contribute to job satisfaction. How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers. v.2

As most people spend a major part of their adult life st work, job satisfaction is an important element of Individual well being. What factors that contribute to job satisfaction. How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers. v. 2
A job is more important than a pay cheque, so it needs to be a source of pride and self respect. Most individuals spend a greater part of their adulthood working and as such deriving satisfaction is very essential. However, it is debatable how realistic it is for one to expect maximum job satisfaction as well as the factors that contributes to it. It is believed that an ideal job should provide a sense of fulfillment, good working environment, fair policies and the feeling of belonging which is every individuals dream but unfortunately, not all employee have such dreams. Other factors include adequate holidays, compensations, career growth, nice colleagues, caring organizations and learning opportunities which are often considered as the most important aspect of a job. For instance, there should be availability of training courses, workshops and seminars that helps individual gain new skills which will help improve their career and job productivity thereby benefitting the workplace and the community. How possible is it to meet the expectations of all employees when it comes to job satisfaction? This is quite feasible because the expectations of employees change with time and it is therefore unrealistic to define a job that is satisfactory. Most employees complain about poor enumerations such as poor salaries and bad working conditions. However, others complain of possibility of redundancy. For example, recently, Fidson Group of companies, a leading pharmaceutical and cosmetics company in Nigeria carried out a survey with all their staff using an online questionnaire on how to improve the staff well being. The most suggested demand was a rise in pay and this was effected two months after the survey. In conclusion, common factors such as salary, work environment, job security amongst other enumeration packages are important aspects for job satisfaction but it is impossible for every employer to be able to satisfy every employee needs in each individual jobs.
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job
is more
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important
than a pay
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cheque
,
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so
it needs to be a source of pride and
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self respect
. Most
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individuals
spend a greater part of their adulthood working and as such deriving
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satisfaction
is
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very
essential.
However
, it is debatable how realistic it is for one to
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expect
maximum
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job
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satisfaction
as well
as the factors that contributes to it.

It
is believed
that an ideal
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job
should provide a sense of fulfillment,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
working environment,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fair
policies and the feeling of belonging which is every
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individuals
dream
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but
unfortunately, not all
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employee
have such dreams. Other factors include adequate holidays, compensations, career growth, nice colleagues, caring organizations and learning opportunities which are
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often
considered as the most
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important
aspect of a
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job
.
For instance
, there should be availability of training courses, workshops and seminars that
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helps
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individual
gain new
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skills
which will
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help
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improve
their career and
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job
productivity thereby
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benefitting
the workplace and the community.

How possible is it to
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meet
the expectations of all
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employees
when it
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comes
to
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job
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satisfaction
? This is quite feasible
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because
the expectations of
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employees
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change
with time and it is
therefore
unrealistic to define a
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job
that is
satisfactory. Most
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employees
complain about poor enumerations such as poor salaries and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
working conditions.
However
, others complain of possibility of redundancy.
For example
, recently,
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Fidson
Group of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
, a leading pharmaceutical and cosmetics
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
in Nigeria carried out a survey with all their staff using an online questionnaire on how to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the staff
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
well being
. The most suggested demand was a rise in pay and this
was effected
two months after the survey.

In conclusion
, common factors such as salary, work environment,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
security amongst other enumeration packages are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
aspects for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
satisfaction
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it is impossible for every employer to be able to satisfy every
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employee
needs in each
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individual
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay As most people spend a major part of their adult life st work, job satisfaction is an important element of Individual well being. What factors that contribute to job satisfaction. How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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