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Question: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. v.17

Question: It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. v. 17
Friends play a big role in our lives and we spend lots of time with them. So, the life is meaningless without any friend. I think, it is rather significant case not to lose contact with old friends than it is to have new friends. There are several reasons I agree with this statement like trustness, memories and so on. First, one of the reason is confidence old friends that provides good relationship. Nowadays, it is tough to find friends due to unknown characteristics of new friends. To know closely new one is a long process. Besides, you may face with unsuitable traits of new friends in this time. Then, it leads to some problems. Like, this situation triggers to untrust your friends. Moreover, maybe your friend is really bad person who affects you adversely. Eventually, you may conflict about many issues that cause stress in your brain. Maybe he or she may damage you physically or pyschologically. On the other hand, if you have old friends, you can rely them easily since you know him very well. It keeps better relationship and it is benefical for social network. Second, old friends have an important portion of your life. Who want to lose a friend in their life? You share lots of events, many information and particular moments with them. These stuffs are so valuable in your own life. They are old friends, so I am sure that they are quite good characteristics. Therefore, you keep in contact with them. Do not forget, they help to overcome your difficulties together but new friends do not guarentee this. To sum up, it is more significant to maintain old friends relationship in our life for confidence and memoriable times.
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Friends
play a
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big
role in our
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lives and
we spend lots of time with them.
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So
, the
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life
is meaningless without any
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friend
. I
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think
, it is
rather
significant case not to lose contact with
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old
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friends
than it is to have
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new
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friends
. There are several reasons I
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agree
with this statement like
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trustness
, memories and
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so
on.

First
, one of the reason is confidence
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old
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friends
that provides
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good
relationship. Nowadays, it is tough to find
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friends
due to unknown characteristics of
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new
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friends
. To know
closely
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new
one is a long process.
Besides
, you may face with unsuitable traits of
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new
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friends
in this time. Then, it leads to
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some
problems. Like, this situation triggers to
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untrust
your
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friends
.
Moreover
, maybe your
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friend
is
really
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bad
person who affects you
adversely
.
Eventually
, you may conflict about
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many
issues that cause
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stress
in your brain. Maybe he or she may damage you
physically
or
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pyschologically
.
On the other hand
, if you have
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old
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friends
, you can
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rely
them
easily
since you know him
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very
well. It
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keeps
better relationship and it is
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benefical
for social network.

Second,
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old
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friends
have an
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important
portion of your
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life
. Who want to lose a
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friend
in their
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life
? You share lots of
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events
,
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many
information and particular moments with them. These stuffs are
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so
valuable in your
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own
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life
. They are
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old
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friends
,
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so
I am sure that they are quite
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good
characteristics.
Therefore
, you
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keep
in contact with them. Do not forget, they
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help
to overcome your difficulties together
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but
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new
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friends
do not
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guarentee
this.

To sum up, it is more significant to maintain
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old
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friends
relationship in our
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life
for confidence and
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memoriable
times.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS essay Question: It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. v. 17

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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