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Question 3: 60 secondsThe university plans to cut down hard printed materials and making the library online. The woman agrees with university's plans. v.1

Question 3: 60 secondsThe university plans to cut down hard printed materials and making the library online. The woman agrees with university's plans. v. 1
In our trendy society, most people are getting job opportunities base upon their skill set and their performance in learning. Some might think that age bar is the issues for elders to continue to fail in performing tasks, whereas other opposed that age doesn’t matter when it comes to knowledge. However, I personally believed that most companies are yet recruiting young employees rather than senior experience person. So, the following paragraphs will discuss this topic comprehensively. An experienced person with enormous knowledge holder can light up with whatever work they are doing. In my perspective, I would say age cannot be specified the person's ability, some believed when getting age, they are loosing the confidence of learning ability. This is because the society has framed this sort of hope for people with deep impacts. To illustrate with an example, Abdul Kalam, a great scientist, until his last breath, he gave his best to serve the nation with loyalty and he himself as a role model for many youngsters, so this proof that age doesn't do anything with knowledge and learning new things. On the contrary, most organisations are recruiting employed for future development of their industrial growth. I think its kind of trick to interchange the role of age people with the future generation. The companies are expected, particularly younger pupils for the reason of getting energy and physical active performance from them. Instead of paying double payment for senior workers, they should ready to recruit two or more employees with less pay. For instance, last year around March, the particular company in Europe laid off high-paid staff and recruit more than 15, 000 fresher with a plausible explanation. This shock the entire nation with negative feedback. I think it's not the best way to recruit a new one with terminating the experience one. In conclusion, I disagree with the statement that age problems with learning new things, it doesn't make sense to accept the fact. What I believe is, age is growing, but learning new things still remain. The recruitment of pupil employees is totally contrasting statement and it doesn't have any association with experience and that depends upon the organisation ideologist.
In our trendy society, most
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people
are getting job opportunities base upon their
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skill
set and their performance in
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learning
.
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Some
might
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think
that
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age
bar is the issues for elders to continue to fail in performing tasks, whereas other opposed that
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age
doesn’t matter when it
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comes
to knowledge.
However
, I
personally
believed that most
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companies
are
yet
recruiting young employees
rather
than senior experience person.
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So
, the following paragraphs will discuss this topic
comprehensively
.

An experienced person with enormous knowledge holder can light up with whatever work they are doing. In my perspective, I would say
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age
cannot
be specified
the person's ability,
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some
believed when getting
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age
, they are
Did you mean "losing the"?
loosing the
confidence of
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learning
ability. This is
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because
the society has framed this sort of hope for
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people
with deep impacts. To illustrate with an example, Abdul
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Kalam
, a great scientist, until his last breath, he gave his best to serve the nation with
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
loyalty and
he himself as a role model for
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many
youngsters,
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so
this proof that
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age
doesn't do anything with knowledge and
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learning
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
things.

On the contrary
, most
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organisations
are recruiting employed for future development of their industrial growth. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
its kind of trick to interchange the role of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
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people
with the future generation. The
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companies
are
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expected
,
particularly
younger pupils for the reason of getting energy and physical active performance from them.
Instead
of paying double payment for senior workers, they should ready to recruit two or more employees with less pay.
For instance
, last year around March, the particular
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
in Europe laid off high-paid staff and recruit more than 15, 000 fresher with a plausible explanation. This shock the entire nation with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
feedback. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
it's not the best way to recruit a
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new
one with terminating the experience one.

In conclusion
, I disagree with the statement that
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age
problems with
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learning
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
things, it doesn't
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sense to accept the fact. What I believe is,
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age
is growing,
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but
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
things
still
remain.

The recruitment of pupil employees is
totally
contrasting statement and it doesn't have any association with experience and that depends upon the
Possible spelling mistake. 'organisation' is British English.
organisation
ideologist.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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Marcus Fabius Quintilian

IELTS essay Question 3: 60 secondsThe university plans to cut down hard printed materials and making the library online. The woman agrees with university's plans. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
363 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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