Although paid work is thought by some to be a good experience for children, other people think it can be detrimental. In my opinion, I think that paid work can bring about more problems for children compared to any advantages it might bring.
Admittedly, there are some basic benefits of children working for money. Firstly, children can develop an understanding of the value of it. This teaches them that money does not grow on trees and helps them appreciate the hard work needed to earn it. Secondly, they take the first steps in learning how to manage money. Many older children, for instance, have a part time job in order to save for something they would otherwise be unable to afford. Understanding money management, furthermore, is useful when, as adults, they will need to balance their finances.
Nevertheless, despite the advantages above, I believe children could face serious drawbacks from paid work. One potentially dangerous problem is that it exposes them to exploitation through slave labour. In some countries that do not enforce children's employment laws, they may end up working under extreme conditions or even in life threatening situations for negligible wages. Starting life in this way makes it almost impossible for them to escape poverty as adults. Another obvious issue is that working may affect a child’s ability to focus on their school work. This is a concern as only with a strong academic performance can a child hope to advance as an adult.
In conclusion, being exploited or struggling with academic grades far outweighs any of the minor benefits that could result from children being involved in work experience.
Although paid
work
is
thought
by
some
to be a
good
experience for
children
, other
people
think
it can be detrimental. In my opinion, I
think
that paid
work
can bring about more problems for
children
compared to any advantages it might bring.
Admittedly
, there are
some
basic benefits of
children
working for
money
.
Firstly
,
children
can develop an understanding of the value of it. This teaches them that
money
does not grow on trees and
helps
them appreciate the
hard
work
needed to earn it.
Secondly
, they take the
first
steps in learning how to manage
money
.
Many
older
children
,
for instance
, have a
part time
job in order to save for something they would
otherwise
be unable to afford. Understanding
money
management,
furthermore
, is useful when, as adults, they will need to balance their finances.
Nevertheless
, despite the advantages above, I believe
children
could face serious drawbacks from paid
work
. One
potentially
dangerous
problem is that it exposes them to exploitation through slave
labour
. In
some
countries that do not enforce children's employment laws, they may
end
up working under extreme conditions or even in life threatening situations for negligible wages. Starting life in this way
makes
it almost impossible for them to escape poverty as adults. Another obvious issue is that working may affect a child’s ability to focus on their school
work
. This is a concern as
only
with a strong academic performance can a child hope to advance as an adult.
In conclusion
,
being exploited
or struggling with academic grades far outweighs any of the minor benefits that could result from
children
being involved
in
work
experience.
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