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q5 Freshman students have to park far away. The students discuss two possible solutions to the problem. Describe the problem and state which of the two solutions you prefer and why. v.1

q5 Freshman students have to park far away. The students discuss two possible solutions to the problem. Describe the problem and state which of the two solutions you prefer and why. v. 1
This essay is about student assignments and late submission. Nowadays, whether universities should deduct marks or not has attracted numerous controversies. Some people believe that if students fail to submit their assignments on time, the university should deduct their marks, while others are in favour of the fact that some people may have some difficulties and several reasons to accomplish their tasks under deadline. As far as I am concerned, schools should set up straight forward and strict rules for a significant section. It is paramount for students completing their work under deadline with full dedication and responsibility. Furthermore, it's totally in the hands of students unless they are unable to meet the deadline due to personal reasons or natural disaster. For example, if any student is busy in a job, it will be a difficult situation for them to manage timelines. Moreover, students should consider their work as valuable rather than giving lame excuses or false statements. On the other hand, some people may argue that in certain situations they are not able to finish the assignment. First and foremost, school and universities should permit extra time for students, who suffer from illness and family problems. Consequently, can have dire outcomes, when they are involved in accidents, unhealthy or suffering medical condition. Also, universities should help students by informing on time through the call or email instead of immediate deduction. Universities should be flexible and not deduct marks. In conclusion, I am more inclined with the idea that those universities should deduct marks on late submission, even though they should be flexible for special cases.
This essay is about
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student
assignments and late submission. Nowadays, whether
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universities
should
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deduct
marks or not has attracted numerous controversies.
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Some
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people
believe that if
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students
fail to submit their assignments on time, the
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university
should
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deduct
their marks, while others are in
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favour
of the fact that
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some
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people
may have
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some
difficulties and several reasons to accomplish their tasks under deadline. As far as I
am concerned
, schools should set up straight forward and strict
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rules
for a significant section.

It is paramount for
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students
completing their work under deadline with full dedication and responsibility.
Furthermore
, it's
totally
in the hands of
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students
unless they are unable to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
the deadline due to personal reasons or natural disaster.
For example
, if any
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student
is busy in a job, it will be a difficult situation for them to manage timelines.
Moreover
,
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students
should consider their work as valuable
rather
than giving lame excuses or false statements.

On the other hand
,
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some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
may argue that in certain situations they are not able to finish the assignment.
First
and foremost, school and
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universities
should permit extra time for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
, who suffer from illness and family problems.
Consequently
, can have dire outcomes, when they
are involved
in accidents, unhealthy or suffering medical condition.
Also
,
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universities
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
by informing on time through the call or email
instead
of immediate deduction.
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Universities
should be flexible and not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
deduct
marks.

In conclusion
, I am more inclined with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
that those
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
universities
should
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
deduct
marks on late submission,
even though
they should be flexible for special cases.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay q5 Freshman students have to park far away. The students discuss two possible solutions to the problem. Describe the problem and state which of the two solutions you prefer and why. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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