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Nowadays sport is a big bussiness with high earnings for professional sports people and companies involved both financially and other ways Is this positive or negative for sports v.1

Nowadays sport is a big bussiness with high earnings for professional sports people and companies involved both financially and other ways Is this positive or negative for sports v. 1
There are a number of people who believe that launching of an extraordinary product is the only gateway to achieve success in business. However, I think that there are many aspects, which need to be considered to take our profession to the top of the market. This essay will delve into my viewpoint before reaching a reasonable conclusion. To begin with, one of the main ways to create a profitable business is through marketing. The way a company advertises its product is very important, as it goes a long way in ensuring companies success because products that are very well advertised, customers tend to purchase those products. For example, there is a famous toothpaste company ‘Pepsodent‘ that attracts more people and has been recorded to have a maximum sales because of its persuading promotion in comparison to other toothpaste companies. Further, the quality of the products also plays a vital role to gain shopper’s satisfaction and to have a long lasting impression on the purchasers, which in turn has a far-reaching influence on the trade. For instance, many customers are meticulous in using a product and if they find that quality of the product is not up to the mark, they switch to another brand that cares about their users. Therefore, the company must maintain the quality of products they offer in order to keep the credibility that they have among customers. In a nutshell, a distinctive product cannot be the single deciding factor of a successful work. A business can flourish by advertising its product and by delivering impeccable quality that meets the customer’s satisfaction.
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who believe that launching of an extraordinary
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product
is the
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However
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think
that there are
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many
aspects, which need to
be considered
to take our profession to the top of the market. This essay will delve into my viewpoint
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before
reaching a reasonable conclusion.

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begin
with, one of the main ways to create a profitable business is through marketing. The way a
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company
advertises its
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product
is
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very
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important
, as it goes a long way in ensuring
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companies
success
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because
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products
that are
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very
well advertised, customers tend to
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purchase
those
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products
.
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famous
toothpaste
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Pepsodent
‘ that attracts more
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people
and has
been recorded
to have a maximum sales
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because
of its persuading promotion
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companies
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quality
of the
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products
also
plays a vital role to gain shopper’s satisfaction and to have a
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long lasting
impression on the purchasers, which in turn has a far-reaching influence on the trade.
For instance
,
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many
customers are meticulous in using a
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product
and if they find that
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quality
of the
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product
is not up to the mark, they switch to another brand that cares about their users.
Therefore
, the
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company
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must
maintain the
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quality
of
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products
they offer in order to
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keep
the credibility that they have among customers.

In a nutshell, a distinctive
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product
cannot be the single deciding factor of a successful work. A business can flourish by advertising its
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product
and by delivering impeccable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quality
that meets the customer’s satisfaction.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Nowadays sport is a big bussiness with high earnings for professional sports people and companies involved both financially and other ways Is this positive or negative for sports v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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