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q2 Do you prefer to take essays exams or multiple-choice exams? Use reasons to support your response. v.1

q2 Do you prefer to take essays exams or multiple-choice exams? Use reasons to support your response. v. 1
Nowadays, mind of people always wanted everything new. While it is often considered that people felt positive to change the environment rather than remain same. In my opinion, I think that change brings significance enjoyable moments as well produced new experience when there are a few problems of changing as well. Nevertheless, modify the environment or moment manufactured extreme benefits to people. Firstly, people can enjoy the new stage. For this reason, while people move to one place from another, they became excited and enjoy the every second of the moment. For example, recently, my brother bought a new house and he felt thrilled when he moved to the house permanently, even, he was silent, he cannot share the feelings only for the excitement. Secondly, new stages always modified the mind to positive way. Furthermore, people always think positive, feel positive while they change the environment because their mind always modified them to start everything newly. Besides, people always appropriate to change because they felt comfortable in new places. On the other hand, there are some problems of switching. One issue is that, change the momentum is quite hard for employers. Because while employers are busy with their work for whole years, they cannot find the moment to modify it. Another problem is that laziness. In other words, lazy people always prefer to stand in the place where they are. Since, they do not change the momentum as well. In short, some usual problems of modifying is there as well. In conclusion, change is highly beneficial whereas a few negatives as well. I personally think that there are more advantages such enjoyment and gaining experience with some drawbacks. Because a few problems can be handled by the people easily.
Nowadays, mind of
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people
always wanted everything
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new
.
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it is
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often
considered that
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people
felt
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positive
to
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change
the environment
rather
than remain same. In my opinion, I
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think
that
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change
brings significance enjoyable
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moments
as well
produced
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new
experience when there are a few
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problems
of changing
as well
.

Nevertheless
, modify the environment or
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moment
manufactured extreme benefits to
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people
.
Firstly
,
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people
can enjoy the
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new
stage.
For this reason
, while
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people
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move
to one place from another, they became excited and enjoy the every second of the
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moment
.
For example
, recently, my brother
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bought
a
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new
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house and
he felt thrilled when he
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moved
to the
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house
permanently
, even, he was silent, he cannot share the feelings
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only
for the excitement.
Secondly
,
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new
stages always modified the mind to
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positive
way.
Furthermore
,
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people
always
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think
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positive
, feel
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positive
while they
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change
the environment
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because
their mind always modified them to
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start
everything
newly
.
Besides
,
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people
always appropriate to
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change
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because
they felt comfortable in
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new
places.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
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problems
of switching. One issue is that,
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change
the momentum is quite
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hard
for employers.
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Because
while employers are busy with their work for whole years, they cannot find the
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moment
to modify it. Another
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problem
is that laziness.
In other words
, lazy
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people
always prefer to stand in the place where they are. Since, they do not
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change
the momentum
as well
. In short,
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some
usual
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problems
of modifying is there
as well
.

In conclusion
,
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change
is
highly
beneficial whereas a few negatives
as well
. I
personally
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think
that there are more advantages such enjoyment and gaining experience with
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some
drawbacks.
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Because
a few
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problems
can
be handled
by the
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people
easily
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay q2 Do you prefer to take essays exams or multiple-choice exams? Use reasons to support your response. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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