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q1. Describe a person who has been a good influence on your life. Please include details and examples to support your answer. v.1

q1. Describe a person who has been a good influence on your life. Please include details and examples to support your answer. v. 1
It iagreed that a few individuals are born with certain talents likewise, sports and music, but other opponents are not holding the same ground because they think that any child can be taught to become perfect in an activity in which children can be indulged easily in any activity than others. This essay will discuss both views, before pondering upon any logical conclusion along with my hypothesis. On the one hand, the minority of people in a society are born with different talents such as sports or music because the ability to perform the task is gifted by God. To better exemplify, the pleasant voice given to the singers to express their feelings through their song like that god gifts various senses to everyone. Not only this, but the upbringing of a child is also matters with the choice of the child because it is a sensitive phase of life. Consequently, some luckiest children are there who are gifted by God. On the other hand, teaching curriculum activities to make a child good in sports and music as hardwork and practice are the key to success as well as people make many efforts to develop their talent. For example, a famous Indian cricket player, Sachin Tendulker, cricket is his passion and makes many efforts to be a captain of Indian cricket team. These successful people motivate others to achieve their goal. Therefore, teaching is a good way to make a child perfect in one activity. In conclusion, some people are gifted with specific talent by God since birth, but others can be taught to become perfect in sports or music by their hard work. In my perspective, children can learn many things during their whole life, if a child want to learm anything.
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before
pondering upon any logical conclusion along with my hypothesis.

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people
in a society
are born
with
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different
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talents
such as
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sports
or
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music
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because
the ability to perform the task
is gifted
by God. To better exemplify, the pleasant voice
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given
to the singers to express their feelings through their song like that god gifts various senses to everyone. Not
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only
this,
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the upbringing of a
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child
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because
it is a sensitive phase of life.
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some
luckiest children are there who
are gifted
by God.

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hand, teaching curriculum activities to
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child
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and
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music
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hardwork
and practice are the key to success
as well
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people
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make
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many
efforts to develop their
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talent
.
For example
, a
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Indian cricket player,
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Sachin
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Tendulker
, cricket is his passion and
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makes
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many
efforts to be a captain of Indian cricket team. These successful
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people
motivate others to achieve their goal.
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, teaching is a
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good
way to
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make
a
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child
perfect in one activity.

In conclusion
,
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some
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people
are gifted
with specific
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talent
by God since birth,
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but
others can
be taught
to become perfect in
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sports
or
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music
by their
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hard
work. In my perspective, children can learn
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many
things during their whole life, if a
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want to
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IELTS essay q1. Describe a person who has been a good influence on your life. Please include details and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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